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At the beginning of the paragraph where this appears, you talk about the "perceived success" in
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Attempting to emulate the perceived-success in
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First and foremost, thank you for your service! It's great to read an article on this topic written by someone who was actually there. Second, this article clearly meets the GA criteria. I have posted some comments below for you to think about as you go for FA, but I am
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The Iraq War in Anbar
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Allawi disbanded the discredited
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