585:"Although Óláfr is known to have had two wives, and no contemporaneous source names the mother of his children, she may have been Óláfr's second wife—Christina, daughter of Fearchar, Earl of Ross, (d. circa 1251)" I got lost a bit in this - I get what you're saying, but I think something like "Although Óláfr is known to have had two wives, and no contemporaneous source names the mother of his children, Magnus' mother may have been Óláfr's second wife—Christina, daughter of Fearchar, Earl of Ross, (d. circa 1251)."
675:"Of these, only three date to the reign of Magnús—one of which, a grant to Conishead Priory in 1256, is the only original royal charter of the dynasty in existence. The Chronicle of Mann, the only indigenous narrative source for the dynasty's sea-realm, was compiled on Mann during Magnús' reign." The connection between these two sentences is very very tenuous - can we get a bit better bridge between them?
444:
430:
399:
375:
348:
338:
313:
299:
285:
253:
502:"Hákon's response to Scottish aggression in the Hebrides was to organise a massive fleet to re-assert Norwegian authority." What Scottish aggression though? All we have is the two Alexanders (And as a total side note, where the HELL did the Scots come up with Alexander as a name for their kings, anyway???) trying to buy the islands... that's not really aggression, even for Scots!
467:
219:
49:
707:
691:
669:
644:
633:
617:
601:
590:
579:
563:
496:
485:
554:) and then Alexander, and David. So none of the names were Gaelic or traditionally borne by the kings beforehand, and four were from her own family. I love how it's sometimes possible to see how historical figures got their names. What I'd like to know is how three of the 9th- and 10th- century kings of the Picts/Scots had a name like Constantine!
722:
I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise
509:
I added some detail into the lead and also the
Scottish aggression section. I want the reader to understand that the two Alexanders were actively trying to acquire the region through negotiation and intimidation, and that the reason why the first Alexander was unsuccessful is because he died in the
569:"At one point during the campaign, Magnús was one of Hákon's vassals who were tasked with raiding deep into the Lennox district." Maybe "At one point during the campaign, Hákon sent Magnús and some other vassals raiding deep into the Lennox district." which makes it active and more engaging.
713:"After becoming a widow, Máire had three successive husbands: Máel Ísu, Earl of Strathearn (d. 1271), Hugh, Lord of Abernethy (d. 1291/2), and William Fitzwarin (d. 1299)." is this really relevant to Magnus though? Good candidate for the notes, I'd think.
718:
Excellent work - I've done a light bit of copyediting. When the above are taken care of, I have no problem with passing it. (If you head to FAC, you'll need a source for the map showing the location of the Battle of Largs, but it's fine for
596:"In 1250, Hákon summoned Haraldr to Norway for his seizure of the kingship..." hm.. something is missing here - do you mean "In 1250, Hákon summoned Haraldr to Norway to answer for his seizure of the kingship..."?
530:. I'm actually reading one of Duncan's books ATM, and in it he says that Margaret's influence over her husband can easily be seen by the names of their sons: Edward (after her father),
54:
723:
mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on.
697:"Magnús is recorded within the Chronicle of Mann as having been knighted by Henry..." there are like a million Henry's in medieval history - which Henry is meant here?
87:
77:
59:
491:"Some leading members of the Crovan dynasty, such as Óláfr,..." does this mean he was a member of the Crovan dynasty? Probably best to make this explicit.
133:
129:
114:
187:
422:
106:
193:
82:
741:
305:
163:
623:"...known to have written letters to Llywelyn ap Gruffydd (d. 1282),..." probably need to explain who Llywelyn is here...
17:
515:
737:
639:"...Scottish-mainland, Hákonar saga Hákonarsonar states that Hákon levied..." what's "Hákonar saga Hákonarsonar"?
225:
551:
531:
511:
271:
245:
607:
Can we use some other word or phrase than "island-kingdom"? There is a lot of usage of it in this section.
535:
657:
That's how the area is often called - "the Lennox". I've changed it to just "Lennox", for simplicity.
547:
122:
758:
745:
731:
180:
167:
755:
728:
539:
177:
157:
750:
Looks good to me. Passing GA. I'll get to the map question on my talk page soon... I promise!
527:
519:
412:
233:
543:
523:
99:
23:
361:
229:
197:
751:
724:
436:
241:
237:
173:
153:
510:
midst of his campaign. About the name, the first
Alexander was one of five sons of
291:
650:"...He sent a detachment of ships deep into the Lennox, through..." THE Lennox?
682:
I added a bit about evidence of seals used by the kings. Does it read OK?
526:
says in his ODNB article that this
Alexander was likely named after
522:. Margaret endeavoured to reform the church in Scotland, and
172:
Whee! Norse-Gael royalty! I'll be reviewing this shortly.
141:
110:
258:
A few spots where the prose could use some smoothing
8:
421:(images are tagged and non-free images have
37:
68:
40:
7:
466:
416:, where possible and appropriate.
218:
31:
705:
689:
667:
642:
631:
615:
599:
588:
577:
561:
494:
483:
465:
442:
428:
397:
373:
370:Fair representation without bias
346:
336:
311:
297:
283:
251:
217:
196:for what the criteria are, and
1:
443:
429:
398:
374:
347:
337:
312:
298:
284:
252:
779:
759:19:25, 7 April 2012 (UTC)
746:08:46, 6 April 2012 (UTC)
732:23:17, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
181:21:45, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
168:21:45, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
24:Talk:Magnus Olafsson/GA1
207:reasonably well written
435:(appropriate use with
200:for what they are not)
552:her great-grandfather
410:It is illustrated by
362:neutral point of view
326:broad in its coverage
738:Brianann MacAmhlaidh
18:Talk:Magnús Óláfsson
736:All done I think!--
423:fair use rationales
394:No edit wars, etc.
267:factually accurate
528:Pope Alexander II
437:suitable captions
96:
95:
22:(Redirected from
770:
712:
709:
708:
696:
693:
692:
674:
671:
670:
649:
646:
645:
638:
635:
634:
622:
619:
618:
606:
603:
602:
595:
592:
591:
584:
581:
580:
568:
565:
564:
520:Edward the Exile
501:
498:
497:
490:
487:
486:
469:
468:
446:
445:
432:
431:
401:
400:
377:
376:
350:
349:
340:
339:
315:
314:
301:
300:
292:reliable sources
287:
286:
255:
254:
221:
220:
146:
137:
118:
50:Copyvio detector
38:
27:
778:
777:
773:
772:
771:
769:
768:
767:
710:
706:
694:
690:
672:
668:
647:
643:
636:
632:
620:
616:
604:
600:
593:
589:
582:
578:
566:
562:
544:her grandfather
524:A. A. M. Duncan
499:
495:
488:
484:
359:It follows the
333:(major aspects)
127:
104:
98:
92:
64:
36:
29:
28:
21:
20:
12:
11:
5:
776:
774:
766:
765:
764:
763:
762:
761:
720:
715:
714:
699:
698:
686:
685:
684:
683:
677:
676:
661:
660:
659:
658:
652:
651:
640:
625:
624:
609:
608:
597:
586:
571:
570:
558:
557:
556:
555:
518:, daughter of
504:
503:
492:
477:
476:
475:
474:
473:
472:
453:
452:
451:
450:
449:
408:
407:
406:
405:
404:
384:
383:
382:
381:
380:
357:
356:
355:
354:
353:
322:
321:
320:
319:
318:
290:(citations to
263:
262:
261:
260:
259:
202:
201:
147:
94:
93:
91:
90:
85:
80:
74:
71:
70:
66:
65:
63:
62:
60:External links
57:
52:
46:
43:
42:
35:
32:
30:
15:
14:
13:
10:
9:
6:
4:
3:
2:
775:
760:
757:
753:
749:
748:
747:
743:
739:
735:
734:
733:
730:
726:
721:
717:
716:
704:
703:
702:
688:
687:
681:
680:
679:
678:
666:
665:
664:
656:
655:
654:
653:
641:
630:
629:
628:
614:
613:
612:
598:
587:
576:
575:
574:
560:
559:
553:
549:
545:
541:
537:
533:
529:
525:
521:
517:
513:
508:
507:
506:
505:
493:
482:
481:
480:
471:
470:
463:
460:
459:
457:
454:
448:
447:
440:
438:
426:
424:
418:
417:
415:
414:
409:
403:
402:
395:
392:
391:
389:
385:
379:
378:
371:
368:
367:
365:
363:
358:
352:
351:
344:
334:
330:
329:
327:
323:
317:
316:
309:
307:
295:
293:
281:
277:
276:
274:
273:
268:
264:
257:
256:
249:
247:
243:
239:
235:
231:
227:
215:
211:
210:
208:
204:
203:
199:
195:
191:
189:
185:
184:
183:
182:
179:
175:
170:
169:
165:
162:
159:
155:
152:
148:
145:
144:
140:
135:
131:
126:
125:
121:
116:
112:
108:
103:
102:
89:
86:
84:
81:
79:
76:
75:
73:
72:
67:
61:
58:
56:
53:
51:
48:
47:
45:
44:
39:
33:
25:
19:
700:
662:
626:
610:
573:Background:
572:
478:
461:
455:
434:
420:
411:
393:
387:
369:
360:
342:
332:
325:
303:
289:
280:(references)
279:
270:
266:
223:
213:
206:
186:
171:
160:
150:
149:
142:
138:
124:Article talk
123:
119:
100:
97:
88:Instructions
627:Norwegian:
536:her brother
512:Malcolm III
238:word choice
111:visual edit
272:verifiable
55:Authorship
41:GA toolbox
462:Pass/Fail
343:(focused)
151:Reviewer:
78:Templates
69:Reviewing
34:GA Review
752:Ealdgyth
725:Ealdgyth
548:Ethelred
516:Margaret
174:Ealdgyth
164:contribs
154:Ealdgyth
83:Criteria
701:Death:
611:Eogan:
550:(after
542:(after
534:(after
479:Lead:
456:Overall
242:fiction
214:(prose)
134:history
115:history
101:Article
663:Acta:
540:Edmund
413:images
388:stable
386:It is
364:policy
324:It is
265:It is
244:, and
234:layout
205:It is
190:review
532:Edgar
246:lists
192:(see
143:Watch
16:<
756:Talk
742:talk
729:Talk
719:GA).
514:and
269:and
230:lead
228:for
198:here
194:here
178:Talk
158:talk
130:edit
107:edit
546:),
538:),
226:MoS
754:-
744:)
727:-
464::
458::
441::
433:b
427::
419:a
396::
390:.
372::
366:.
345::
341:b
335::
331:a
328:.
310::
306:OR
302:c
296::
288:b
282::
278:a
275:.
250::
240:,
236:,
232:,
222:b
216::
212:a
209:.
188:GA
176:-
166:)
132:|
113:|
109:|
740:(
711:Y
695:Y
673:Y
648:Y
637:Y
621:Y
605:Y
594:Y
583:Y
567:Y
500:Y
489:Y
439:)
425:)
308:)
304:(
294:)
248:)
224:(
161:·
156:(
139:·
136:)
128:(
120:·
117:)
105:(
26:)
Text is available under the Creative Commons Attribution-ShareAlike License. Additional terms may apply.