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I've read through the article and the sources in search of another hook. It is difficult. The article says he was a
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Hmm... Some of the issues are resolved, but the article as I found it still was very difficult to read and understand. The ALT2 hook does not correctly convey the sense that I found in the cited sources. ALT3 is very awkwardly worded (both in the hook and in the article), and I don't find it
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The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below.
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