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573:." - I have no idea what's going on here. You already said "During January 10, the cyclone directly passed over the Torres Islands and came within 65 km (40 mi) of the Banks Islands". This sort of info should be together. Or, is all of this in Torba Province? That means little for people who don't know the provinces of Vanuatu. 449:
This is all to say that the article needs a fairly extensive copyediting session (though I haven't gone beyond the lead yet, so I could be making assumptions). The content seems good at first glance. I'll try to go through the page in the near future, but I can't make any promises, so you might want
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This article is about Severe Tropical Cyclone Anne which affected the island nations of Tuvalu, Vanuatu, New Caledonia and the Solomon Islands back in January 1988. I have worked on this article for several months now and feel that now is the time for me to obtain some feedback on it from the
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all reported extensive damage to property and crops with at least 25 houses and 5 classrooms damaged." - this directly contradicts the previous sentences about the province escaping the strong winds. Or, was there heavy damage due to lighter winds? Something isn't
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During January 12 after the cyclone had turned and started to move towards the south, Cyclone Anne became the most powerful tropical cyclone to affect New Caledonia in 12 years as it made landfall on the French Overseas
543:"Within Vanuatu, over 1600 people were made homeless while wind gusts of up to 225 km/h (140 mph) were recorded." - neither are related aside from general impact. You should have met stats separate from actual impacts 376:"Within" is used 19 times in the relatively short article (including at the beginnings of three sentences in the second impact of preps/impact). Try to find some different words... in, on, over, throughout, across. 487:, saying what the FMS is. That way, the reader knows instantly that it is an important meteorological service, and not just some weather office for Fiji. Ditto with "United States Joint Typhoon Warning Center". 473:
No need to link Roy in the See also, considering it's linked already. Find another link. Ditto Agi. Link Agi in the article when you first mention it. Then, you should find other, similar storms to link in see
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I was active over the weekend as I seriously needed some fun and a break from RL, which is still rather busy. As a result I feel I like I have to withdraw this FAC as i cannot guarantee to get to it by the
576:"There were reports of 4–5 m (13–16 ft) tidal waves" - so, most people think of tidal waves as tsunamis, or something of the sort. I assume this refers to just storm-generated waves? 514:"where strong gale force winds of 70 km/h (45 mph) were recorded" - as it was a gust, does the mph need to be rounded to the nearest 5? Typically we don't if it's an exact gust. 517:
You might want to add a note about "10-minute sustained". As 10-minute is the standard, you could add a note saying all wind values are 10-minute unless otherwise stated.
335:- this could simply be "After turning toward the south on January 12, Anne struck New Caledonia, becoming the strongest tropical cyclone to affect the FOT in 12 years." 289:"Before" and "after" are collectively used ~17 times in the lead and MH. There's nothing inherently wrong with the words, but the sentence structure they lend itself to 602:. When this was abolished it was apparently determined that 1 ECU = 1 Euro and as a result I felt it better to use the non-fictional currency rather than the fictional. 242: 540:"Vanuatuan" isn't correct. The denonym is "Ni-Vanuatu", but I don't think that's any better for such a general term. Are you ok with "Northern Vanuatu Islands"? 636:
Just for the record I am aware of these comments but have become busy in real life, i am aiming to deal with most of them on Sunday if i dont find time before.
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You mention winds "up to 150 km/h (95 mph)" in Noumea. That's useless, as technically 1 km/h is within the range of 0 up to 150. Do you know the exact figure?
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It seems weird to mention Roy in the first two lines of the article, since—as far as I can tell—the storms had nothing to do with each other.
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There are references to Euros in the articles because the references for the aftermath are from the EU and use the "fictional"
582:"Some areas reported crop damage between 90 and 100%" - which areas? Was it just one farm? That sentence is kinda wishy-washy? 273:
Not sure to be honest since they were twins per the JTWC and if it was today we would probably be finding impact in Kiribati.
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Do you have a better way of saying "as it was caught up in the upper westerly flow"? It could use a bit more explanation.
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boat was scheduled to be sunk on January 12, but was moved to January 19 due to the cyclones." - this needs context
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Ranges should use unspaced endashes not hyphens or emdashes (and check dash usage in article body as well)
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On its own its probably not overly reliable, however, my thought process was that it backs up what the
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There were none associated with the news articles when i checked them on Lexis Nexis this morning.
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has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see
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to enlist another editor in the meantime. Shouldn't be too hard to get this in shape. –
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How are there references to Euros? They didn't come out until 7 years after the storm
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You say it was the strongest New Caledonia landfall, but you don't say the winds. Why?
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torrential rain, flooding and storm surge caused damage to houses, crops, and property
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Be consistent in where you include publisher locations, and be more specific than US
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You did some copyediting so could you clairfy if this is still an issue.
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Ive removed one instance and will see what I can do when i get chance.
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Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in
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I think you should put a note in, along the lines of what I did in
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dashes script over the article and hope that this is now sorted.
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Hope none of these are too troublesome to deal with. Cheers! ♫
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Be consistent in whether you include publishers for periodicals
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I have found an archive url of this page and fixed it.
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After the cyclone had moved back into the Coral Sea
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Knowledge:Featured article candidates
featured article nomination
Knowledge talk:Featured article candidates
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Cyclone Anne
Jason Rees
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Jason Rees
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16:48, 30 April 2015 (UTC)
Jason Rees
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12:49, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

Jason Rees
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12:49, 1 May 2015 (UTC)
Jason Rees
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16:37, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
Jason Rees
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22:32, 6 May 2015 (UTC)
Jason Rees
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