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The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. So the whole notion of sealed-bid auctions is only explicitly in the lead and should be in
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Biggest problem as I see it with the article right now is a lack of inline references (there are only two now). My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. See
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External links are typically for things that are useful for understanding the subject of the article but are not used as references. The official website should be listed here, but I am not sure any of the others should be. See
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There is a one sentence section and some short (one or two sentence) paragraphs - these break up the flow of the article and should be merged with others or perhaps expanded
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My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - but as two examples, history and sale of unclaimed winning bids are not in the lead. Please see
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Any chance for a free image of the headquarters building or one of the key personnel? Business articles can use the company's logo as a
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Please add more wikilinks to the article - The Times and many of the businesses mentioned could be linked, for example. Please see
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I've listed this article for peer review because this is my first article and I want to get it right!
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