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Thank you very much for the review; it's exactly what I needed. I made all of the suggested prose fixes. The two cites are shorthand; the publisher is included in the full reference at the bottom. The Sugar Bowl basketball tournament doesn't have a related article that I could find, so I created a
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I've listed this article for peer review because I plan on taking this new article to GA status, and I feel a good PR is needed to fix any weaknesses before a GAN nom. Prose comments in particular are welcome, as I'm much worse at finding flaws in my own writing than that of others (the curse of
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252:"Hirsch also said before the grand jury that Spivey and West, the ringleader, had not met." - "Before" might be taken to refer to time. Would this be slightly more clear: "Hirsch also told the grand jury that Spivey and West, the ringleader, had not met"?
242:"Kentucky's athletic board said evidence pointed to him fixing games during the 1950 Sugar Bowl Tournament" - Could "1950 Sugar Bowl Tournament" be linked to something? I associate the Sugar Bowl with football rather than basketball.
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dedicated reviewers). If anyone could provide a big-picture look at the article as a whole, that would be great as well. I will do my best to address all concerns presented here.
265:"Spivey got into a fight with Globetrotters player Bobby "Showboat" Hall" - Any idea what the fight was about? Did Hall taunt Spivey about alleged point shaving?
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I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at
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red link for it. Unfortunately, I was unable to find anything more on the fight, not to mention a free photo. Thanks again!
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