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630:"Above the Marble Hall is the feat of engineering that is its roof, whose design was made difficult by the shape of the Marble Hall below and the great weight of the roof." perhaps just say "Above the Marble Hall is its roof, whose design was made difficult by the shape of the Marble Hall below and the great weight of the roof." for simplicity. What you say next goes to show it is a feat of engineering. 154: 627:, is fairly unusual for Neoclassical architecture" how do we know it was her favorite room. Doesn't needed to be added, but it doesn't seem normal that a queen would go around saying "This is my favorite room" to people. 518:"Stylistically, the interiors are very Italian, decorated with stones and stucco. This is very noticeable, for instance, in the Mirror Gallery" you use very twice in close proximity. Be careful 'bout that. 565:
and painted by Giacomo Antonio Corbellini, that feature depictions of the Ducal hunting grounds and horns, the monogram of Duke Eberhard Louis, and the stucco and fresco work of Swiss artist
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and painted by Giacomo Antonio Corbellini, featuring depictions of the Ducal hunting grounds and horns, the monogram of Duke Eberhard Louis, and the stucco and fresco work of Swiss artist
591:"However, the pulpit and organ were moved into the Ordensbau by King Frederick I. " just seems out of place, perhaps add some context (not sure why a however is merited). 342:, where he spent the remainder 1705 into 1706." see above with this sentence, especially the last segment "where...1706" perhaps change to "where he spent the remainder 588:
established the Schlosskapelle for Protestantism, but today is Catholic." confused on this. was he establishing another church, or making the existing one Protestant?
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I should probably state now that I think I have mild dyslexia, so I'm pretty prone to forgetting words or writing a word twice in a sentence (the the, for example). –
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I believed I have fixed this with the removal of two commas. I've been experimenting with the damn things for years and I'm still leaning how to use them. –
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From there, however, there is an obvious departure from Versailles" Be careful the article doesn't delve into a prosey, tour guideish tone.
616:"Hidden inside the building are the various secret halls, quarters, and even the two courtyards at either end of the building designed by 99: 539:" Fortunately, examples of original flooring still exist in the Hunting pavilion." I don't see any indication of why this is fortunate. 536:"additional windows to cover the windows" again, if you could think of something different than window twice, that could be better. 569:
on the ceiling." consider replacing 'that feature' with 'featuring'. "At the center of the Jagdpavillon is the Marmorsaletta, the
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Everything past Architecture is subject to rewrite. Had hoped I wouldn't have to rewrite all that stuff. –
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in the attic of Frisoni's roof." I see two examples of sentences starting with in right after each other.
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this really is a very good article. That's pretty much it. Got up to 'interiors. PLEASE PING ME TOMORROW
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30 hectares. I have found and added a citation for the size (and from the horse's mouth, too!) –
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I will address all of these in my rewrite of those sections, underway as I type this reply. –
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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel I am nearly ready for an attempt at
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See above - I added the "of" you recommended and deleted a comma to help with the flow. –
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used by the servant staff and for drainage that remain preserved today." Drainage?
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to prevent further damage to the roof caused by standing water. In 1809, King
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ping me soon, as I will later have time to comment more– if I don't forget.
200:"and brought as many as 311,000 by October 2017." is that in 2017 alone? 598:
awaits and may sometimes spray visitors with water." perhaps you meant
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Changed to "...heralded the end of Jenisch's tenure at Ludwigsburg" –
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This is indeed in 2017 alone. Those are the only numbers I found. –
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1705, until leaving in mid-1706." or something similar
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and, for Eberhard Louis, culminated in the decisive
550:placed a preserved piece of clockwork taken from 228:and brought as many as 311,000 by October 2017 70: 8: 77: 63: 32: 203:How big is the 'massive' blooming garden. 206:perhaps remove the red links in the lede 35: 227: 7: 24: 338:, was inspired by the palaces of 331:"Eberhard Louis, dreaming of an 152: 415:Fixed! Thanks for responding. – 1: 284:Redlinks removed from lead. – 195:Quick Comments from Eddie891 164:discussion has been closed. 678: 609:, through court architect 507:15:18, 31 March 2018 (UTC) 491:15:02, 31 March 2018 (UTC) 468:13:05, 30 March 2018 (UTC) 448:13:25, 30 March 2018 (UTC) 427:13:25, 30 March 2018 (UTC) 397:14:12, 16 March 2018 (UTC) 377:15:03, 16 March 2018 (UTC) 361:14:23, 16 March 2018 (UTC) 325:15:01, 16 March 2018 (UTC) 296:08:59, 12 March 2018 (UTC) 280:08:55, 12 March 2018 (UTC) 262:04:48, 12 March 2018 (UTC) 250:because he asked me too. – 242:04:48, 12 March 2018 (UTC) 223:12:31, 11 March 2018 (UTC) 190:03:31, 11 March 2018 (UTC) 645:09:43, 2 April 2018 (UTC) 532:11:28, 1 April 2018 (UTC) 623:"Her favorite room, her 662:April 2018 peer reviews 611:Philippe de La Guêpière 18:Knowledge:Peer review 579:Luca Antonio Colomba 567:Luca Antonio Colomba 304:Duchy of Württemberg 594:"where a state of 573:hall decorated in 561:hall decorated in 308:Battle of Blenheim 28:Ludwigsburg Palace 530: 466: 395: 221: 169: 168: 142:Watch peer review 87: 86: 669: 642: 637: 552:Zwiefalten Abbey 522: 504: 499: 488: 483: 478: 458: 445: 440: 424: 419: 407: 387: 374: 369: 358: 353: 322: 317: 293: 288: 277: 272: 259: 254: 239: 234: 213: 187: 182: 156: 155: 149: 139: 130: 111: 79: 72: 65: 47: 33: 677: 676: 672: 671: 670: 668: 667: 666: 652: 651: 640: 635: 581:on the ceiling. 528: 502: 497: 486: 481: 472: 464: 443: 438: 422: 417: 401: 393: 372: 367: 356: 351: 320: 315: 291: 286: 275: 270: 257: 252: 237: 232: 219: 185: 180: 153: 145: 120: 97: 91: 83: 51:Manual of Style 43: 31: 22: 21: 20: 12: 11: 5: 675: 673: 665: 664: 654: 653: 650: 649: 648: 647: 628: 621: 618:Donato Frisoni 614: 607:Charles Eugene 603: 592: 589: 582: 555: 540: 537: 534: 524: 516: 513: 512: 511: 510: 509: 460: 452: 451: 450: 431: 430: 429: 410: 409: 408: 389: 383:more to come. 381: 380: 379: 363: 329: 328: 327: 300: 299: 298: 282: 266: 265: 264: 215: 207: 204: 201: 167: 166: 157: 147: 146: 144: 90: 85: 84: 82: 81: 74: 67: 59: 56: 55: 54: 53: 48: 38: 37: 30: 25: 23: 15: 14: 13: 10: 9: 6: 4: 3: 2: 674: 663: 660: 659: 657: 646: 643: 638: 632: 631: 629: 626: 622: 619: 615: 612: 608: 604: 601: 597: 593: 590: 587: 583: 580: 576: 572: 568: 564: 560: 556: 553: 549: 545: 541: 538: 535: 533: 529: 527: 521: 517: 514: 508: 505: 500: 494: 493: 492: 489: 484: 476: 471: 470: 469: 465: 463: 457: 453: 449: 446: 441: 435: 434: 432: 428: 425: 420: 414: 413: 411: 405: 400: 399: 398: 394: 392: 386: 382: 378: 375: 370: 364: 362: 359: 354: 348: 347: 345: 341: 337: 334: 330: 326: 323: 318: 312: 311: 309: 305: 301: 297: 294: 289: 283: 281: 278: 273: 267: 263: 260: 255: 249: 245: 244: 243: 240: 235: 229: 226: 225: 224: 220: 218: 212: 208: 205: 202: 199: 198: 197: 196: 192: 191: 188: 183: 176: 174: 165: 163: 158: 151: 150: 143: 138: 137: 133: 128: 124: 119: 118: 114: 109: 105: 101: 96: 95: 89: 88: 80: 75: 73: 68: 66: 61: 60: 58: 57: 52: 49: 46: 45:Copying check 42: 41: 40: 39: 34: 29: 26: 19: 599: 544:mansard roof 523: 479:sure thing – 459: 388: 343: 214: 194: 193: 177: 170: 159: 135: 131: 117:Article talk 116: 112: 93: 27: 586:Frederick I 548:Frederick I 336:Württemberg 302:"which the 162:peer review 104:visual edit 333:absolutist 656:Category 520:Eddie891 475:Eddie891 456:Eddie891 404:Eddie891 385:Eddie891 248:Eddie891 246:Pinging 211:Eddie891 178:Thanks, 596:Bacchus 127:history 108:history 94:Article 36:Toolbox 605:"Duke 600:statue 584:"King 575:stucco 571:marble 563:stucco 559:marble 340:Munich 625:study 173:WP:FA 160:This 136:Watch 16:< 641:_IV✠ 636:Vami 526:Work 503:_IV✠ 498:Vami 487:_IV✠ 482:Vami 462:Work 444:_IV✠ 439:Vami 423:_IV✠ 418:Vami 391:Work 373:_IV✠ 368:Vami 357:_IV✠ 352:Vami 321:_IV✠ 316:Vami 292:_IV✠ 287:Vami 276:_IV✠ 271:Vami 258:_IV✠ 253:Vami 238:_IV✠ 233:Vami 217:Work 186:_IV✠ 181:Vami 123:edit 100:edit 658:: 344:of 175:. 140:• 125:| 106:| 102:| 477:: 473:@ 406:: 402:@ 132:· 129:) 121:( 113:· 110:) 98:( 78:e 71:t 64:v

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