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On an aesthetic level, it could work better if you space out the pictures along the right hand side so that they don't clog up the first half of the article and leave the rest as just text. A minor point, but everything is scrutinised on FAC (even if it takes a while to get good comments here - I'll
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I've cleared up a lot of red links, many just redirects to a list of characters mentioning the one I redirected from, and including a sentence or two. Things like PBS Research I've unlinked, they're unlikely to ever become articles. Mail-It Shop and Fix-It Shop will come eventually, they're both
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is certainly a matter of debate; where and by what authority has Sesame Street been objectively described as such? In the minds of most
Christians, this "title" would belong to Jesus Christ; perhaps "one of the world's greatest educators" would be more acceptable to all who read this article.
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Generally pretty good. Good work! However, in the classic skin, I see a block of 8 images before I see any text; the lead is rather short; and the text is rather choppy in places, with one sentence paragraphs which could be consolidated or expanded. --
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Twice on peer review before, only once was there response. I just really wanna get featured status for this article. Check out the "Characters" section, a 360 from the original list! Be vicious, be ruthless, I just want this up to par... --
120:"Through its worldwide influence, Sesame Street and other Sesame Workshop productions have earned the distinction of being considered the world's single greatest "educator", by viewers, international recognition, and success."
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seems inappropriate here; perhaps "Because of" or "In recognition of" or "As a result of", might be more acceptable. There is also the problem of several things being described as
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is very confusing and difficult to understand in it's context. Clarification would allow understanding to come more easily to the reader. RogerK 05:14, Jun 18, 2005 (UTC)
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