350:" Most of those he spoke with were convinced that he was acting on behalf of the federal government. Correspondence from Adair's former commander, James Wilkinson, confirmed this idea in Adair's mind. In 1806, Burr was arrested in Frankfort on charges of treason; officials claimed he actually intended to create a new, independent nation in Spanish lands, not expand U.S. holdings there." I didn't understand this first time around. Could I suggest "Most of those he spoke with believed he was acting on behalf of the federal government and intended to expand U.S. holdings in Mexico. Adair believed this too, having received letters from his former commander, James Wilkinson, that appeared to confirm this. In 1806, however, Burr was arrested in Frankfort on charges of treason; officials claimed he in fact intended to create a new, independent nation in Spanish lands."
478:"During his term, he made only one speech, and it was so inaudible and no one knew what position he was advocating. The House reporter guessed it was about mounting some federal troops on horseback." Unclear if this meant the reporter guessed (correctly), or guessed (incorrectly) - it could mean either. If the latter, I'd suggest "The House reporter speculated that it concerned mounting federal troops on horseback."
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205:"Adair's participation in the War of 1812 and a subsequent protracted defense of Kentucky's soldiers against Andrew Jackson's charges that they showed cowardice at the Battle of New Orleans restored his reputation." - suggest commas around "and a subsequent protracted defense of Kentucky's soldiers against Andrew Jackson's charges that they showed cowardice at the Battle of New Orleans"
393:"the ones who did were primarily armed with their personal rifles" - "personal rifle" could mean a couple of different things (an infantryman is issued a personal rifle; I could bring my personal rifle to a battle rather than being issued with one). How about "privately owned rifles"? "civilian rifles"?
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645:"John Adair was born in Chester County, South Carolina, a son of Scottish immigrants Baron William and Mary (Moore) Adair..." When? I know his birthdate is included in the lead and the infobox but it should also be included in the body of the article and referenced accordingly IMO.
336:"he visited with many prominent politicians, Adair among them, about the possibility of wresting Mexico from Spain" - I'm not sure the "visited" and "about the possibility" match up (you could go for "visited with... to discuss the possibility..."?)
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I think there might be a template that does this, but there were a bunch of economics-related cautions about when to use it and when not to, and since I don't claim to be an economist, I've steered clear of it.
266:"blindly" is just a metaphor for his poor overall physical condition. Anyway, it sounded to me like it might not have been the actual smallpox but complications from it that resulted in his re-capture.
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137:- Eutaek or Euntaek? Either way, his title shouldn't be italicized in footnotes. Be consistent in whether you provide places for books. Check for repeated wikilinks: you've got
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One more minor nitpick. Some of the ISBNs have dashs in the them and some don't, I don't believe it matters which style you adopt but you should probably be consisistent.
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