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Talk:1943 Gibraltar Liberator AL523 crash/GA1

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49: 184:"general Władysław Sikorski and several other passengers. General Władysław Sikorski " firstly, be consistent with the capitalisation of General/general when you use it here, secondly, no need to repeat his rank/first name in the lead. 193:
From the lead "The 1943 Gibraltar B-24 crash led" it would be better to not force yourself to repeat the article title, instead write nice prose and say that on 4 July 1943, a Polish Army B-24 Liberator crashed upon takeoff from
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I'm a little confused why there's a forked article to "Sikorski's death conspiracies" (which isn't a great title unless you know exactly who this particular Sikorski is)... I'd consider merging that article into this
54: 220:"Apart from the pilot Eduard Prchal (the only survivor of the crash) all the other five crew members died" not great, perhaps "Of the passengers and six crew, only the pilot Eudaurd Prchal survived" 241:
I'm quite concerned over the spread of the information which should all be in this article but seems to be across (at least) three articles. There's some work to be done here so I'm going to
59: 227:"which is still being investigated by the Polish Institute of National Remembrance. The investigation is ongoing As of 2012." merge these, and don't capitalise As mid-sentence. 133: 234: 129: 87: 114: 230:
Be selective with the images, that gallery isn't particularly useful. If you merged the conspiracy article to this one, you could place these appropriately.
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For a non-expert, it's confusing why it's called a B-24 crash in the article heading and template, but throughout the aircraft is referred to as a Liberator.
77: 106: 17: 163: 187:"the Prime Minister of the Polish government in exile" is there a link for Prime Minister? also "government-in-exile" should be hyphenated. 245:
it for the moment, but I'm happy to discuss the way forward, and am content to work with the nominator to work out the best solution.
181:"led to the death" resulted in the death. And I would suggest you state it resulted in the death of X people, including General .... 82: 122: 250: 157: 99: 214:"Fatalities included: passengers:" strange formatting. Perhaps "Fatalities amongst the passengers included:" 271: 254: 167: 246: 153: 178:
Lead isn't an adequate summary of the whole article, I'd look to tip your hat at every major section.
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Non-English language references need to state (in Polish) or whatever language they're in.
190:"While this catastrophe"... that's too much of a point of view. Neutralise the language. 261: 259:
Most issues addressed, with the exception of lead, merger, and gallery. --
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There seems to be more info about the flight itself at
141: 110: 217:"Victor Cazalet" the only fatality not referenced. 235:Military history of Gibraltar during World War II 8: 37: 18:Talk:1943 Gibraltar Liberator AL523 crash 68: 40: 262:Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus 7: 210:"other passengers perished" -: --> 31: 24:Talk:1943 Gibraltar B-24 crash/GA1 1: 200:Ref 1 seems to be missing a ) 272:12:38, 18 August 2013 (UTC) 255:16:37, 15 August 2013 (UTC) 168:16:24, 14 August 2013 (UTC) 287: 223:" and might have " -: --> 237:than in this article. 96: 95: 22:(Redirected from 278: 268: 247:The Rambling Man 154:The Rambling Man 146: 137: 118: 50:Copyvio detector 38: 27: 286: 285: 281: 280: 279: 277: 276: 275: 270: 266: 127: 104: 98: 92: 64: 36: 29: 28: 21: 20: 12: 11: 5: 284: 282: 260: 239: 238: 231: 228: 225: 221: 218: 215: 212: 211:"were killed". 208: 205: 201: 198: 195: 191: 188: 185: 182: 179: 147: 94: 93: 91: 90: 85: 80: 74: 71: 70: 66: 65: 63: 62: 60:External links 57: 52: 46: 43: 42: 35: 32: 30: 15: 14: 13: 10: 9: 6: 4: 3: 2: 283: 274: 273: 269: 263: 257: 256: 252: 248: 244: 236: 232: 229: 226: 222: 219: 216: 213: 209: 206: 202: 199: 196: 194:Gilbratar.... 192: 189: 186: 183: 180: 177: 176: 175: 174: 170: 169: 165: 162: 159: 155: 152: 148: 145: 144: 140: 135: 131: 126: 125: 121: 116: 112: 108: 103: 102: 89: 86: 84: 81: 79: 76: 75: 73: 72: 67: 61: 58: 56: 53: 51: 48: 47: 45: 44: 39: 33: 25: 19: 258: 242: 240: 172: 171: 160: 150: 149: 142: 138: 124:Article talk 123: 119: 100: 97: 88:Instructions 111:visual edit 267:reply here 55:Authorship 41:GA toolbox 151:Reviewer: 78:Templates 69:Reviewing 34:GA Review 173:Comments 164:contribs 83:Criteria 134:history 115:history 101:Article 143:Watch 16:< 251:talk 243:fail 224:may. 204:one. 158:talk 130:edit 107:edit 253:) 166:) 132:| 113:| 109:| 264:| 249:( 161:· 156:( 139:· 136:) 128:( 120:· 117:) 105:( 26:)

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