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215:"The system continued to travel toward Cuba, making landfall there, and then made a third landfall in the Florida Keys. " - try to avoid landfall twice in the same sentence. Also, "continued to travel toward Cuba" is false, since it implies that it was moving toward Cuba at some point. However, earlier in the lede you only mention it striking Central America, which is not on the way to Cuba.
261:"The system that would eventually become the hurricane was first detected on October 4" - that's sort of awkward, saying "the system that would become the hurricane". It makes sense when a storm is named and you do that, but I don't think it works well. Perhaps something like "The hurricane originated from a "cyclone perturbation" near Barbados on October 4", or something like that.
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514:"The hurricane's center passed east of Havana during the evening of October 17, with a pressure recorded of 977 mbar (hPa; 28.86 inHg)." - how strong were the winds? And when did it hit Cuba proper? Havana is on the north coast. It can't have struck Havana based on its trajectory (and you failed to mention its northeast turn as well)
491:"By then, it was be noted that the storm was near Cuba by then, when a report was issued via a telegraph from Havana" - that sentence is all-around pretty poor, I'm sorry. When you're writing the MH, you have to focus on what the storm actually did, not on who reported on what the storm did when and where.
744:"The wall of a legation of the United States was blown down, and Vedado's sea baths were severely damaged" - that seems like an odd juxtaposition. One deals with a government agency (and btw, you should link legation, I didn't know what it was), and the other deals with... sea baths?
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819:"Many parks were destroyed in the city, with trees blown down." - that seems odd, given that a park is just a designated area. It'd be like saying a city was destroyed, which, aside from a meteor or a nuclear bomb, is unlikely to happen in a natural disaster.
721:"Havana sustained major damage, with fifty houses destroyed, and cable operators in Miami, Santiago, and Jamaica were unable to contact Havana." - try avoiding saying the city's name twice. Also, it'd be helpful to mention the hurricane somewhere in there.
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284:"The system was recognized as a tropical storm early on October 8, with winds of 40 mph (65 km/h), while near Grand Cayman." - the storm most definitely did not form near Grand Cayman, which is located near Cuba. Try finding a better location
796:"In San Luis, tobacco crops were ruined by the storm. In addition, another 150 tobacco barns in the Alquízar municipality were destroyed." - can't you find a way to merge those sentences? They basically cover the same information.
865:"In Miami, over 100 houses had been destroyed" - why the sudden switch in verb usage? The rest of the article used basic past or simple passive voice tense, but this introduces the unnecessary "had been destroyed" format.
307:"By October 9, air pressures had fallen to 1006 mbar (hPa; 29.72 inHg) in Colón, while air pressures at Bluefields, Nicaragua had fallen to 1001 mbar (hPa; 29.57 inHg)." - what does this have to do with the storm?
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