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This is a mix of leaving out too much information and saying what is said in too many words. How about "The race starts at Fort
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There were only 7 female handcycle finishers. Have changed to top 3 for handcycle event (as they had far fewer finishers), top 10 for others seems okay to me (as there were at east 20 wheelchair finishers of each gender, the times for 10th place are reasonably competitive, and they are mostly
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There's a lot of places where you use words like "around" and "about", i.e. " Around 18 miles into the race". I think you can leave those out and just say, "At 18 miles into the race" (or even, "at 18 miles"). It's understood that "18 miles" means "about 18 miles", not 18.000
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I've added major roads/bridges crossed in the race. There's a lot more roads listed for
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What I would add to the lede is a short description of the course. At least mention that it covers all 5 boroughs, with a brief description of the route. I would also mention that the top prizes are $ 100,000.
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This will read better if you combine the first two sentences: "...of the NYC Marathon, which was held on
November 7, 2021". I don't think you need to explain that the New York City Marathon was held in New York
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I don't see the need for the colored backgrounds. It took me a while to figure out they were gold, silver, and bronze, but that doesn't really add anything to the comprehension of the event.
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There's a lot of short choppy sentences here, and a lot of repetition of the phrase "also competed". Ditto for "featured". This needs some general copyediting to make it flow better.
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Weather is an important factor in running performance. We don't need a detailed weather report, but was it hot, cold, sunny, rainy, windy? How did that affect the finishing times?
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Lose the photo of Keli O'Hara. This article is about the race. I see that she competed, but a picture of her singing at an unrelated event doesn't add anything to this article.
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How did the results this year compare with other years? Was this a fast race? Slow race? Nothing special?
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