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I am sorry you had your edits reverted, that is annoying. I took a look at the article yesterday because it was on the SFBA list of things needing fixing (and I recently renewed my membership!). I was not bothered by the inline external refs because one could use them to find supporting citations. I
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I get a bit of a bee in my bonnet about articles that use lots of inline external links and have little inependent sourcing. I find it looks messy and reads poorly - I have little faith in an encyclopedia article that seems to spend most of its time pushing me towards the website of the subject.
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