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Yeah, okay. I was thinking it would be the other way around, that knowing the situation would then establish more meaning to e.g. the parts about interviewing Marie, but looking again I think it's fine either way. I've switched the order because my preference on this wasn't strong; if there's
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I think it's not an unreasonable guess that some conservative media were less keen on this article than the ones you've cited. I admittedly could not find any, but you know the source material better than I do; are there no bad reviews worth giving weight to?
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Everything looks good, passing this shortly. One suggestion, which I'm not going to hold this up over; if the book based on this article is not independently notable, then a decent case could be made for a NFUR for its cover as an illustration here, I think.
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