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October 2014 but there's no signposts that verify this. (This also sounds redundant, because the next
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Thanks. I performed a to trim some more redundancies. You also have an issue with shifting tense (some stuff is given in the past, some present.) Not sure if I got all of the relevant ones switched to past, so something to keep an eye out on. With the other issues addressed above, I think it's now
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Zahler incorporated some details of his personal life into the script, remarking: "Most characters I write have some attributes in common with me, and some attributes that are not. Certainly when
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Russell's agent handed over the script to Peter Sarsgaard, who enjoyed the script and signed on to the movie, leading to him passing the script off to Russell. Moved all info regarding Russell reading the script and his thoughts into a singular paragraph and moved it to the first
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October in casting coming before September casting? Also, why are you giving details about specific roles? We already got a full cast list after the plot section.
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reviews for movies, especially in the horror genre, so their interview with Zahler, which was done professionally, should be taken into account. They are not self-published. - 祝好，
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It's alright. Just a bit busy at the moment but I'll try to answer the concerns below as quick as possible. - 祝好，
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