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I am not certain about the first sentence of the first paragraph, particularly the “with whom she had previously collaborated several times” part. In the reference given, it only mentions their work together on “Son of a Gun (I Betcha Think This Song Is About You)” so I am not sure what is meant by
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I have received notes in the past about the use of non-free media, particularly audio samples. How is this audio sample used to illustrate something that cannot be illustrated through words? I would adjust the caption to better show the way that the sample does this, otherwise it seems to be there
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The reference for the following sentence (The first was on 1998 remixes of "Go Deep," the second in 2001 on a remix of "Son of a Gun" from All for You (2001), and the last on "The 1" from
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I am not sure if the “club-ready” quote is necessary for the lead. It also does not make complete sense in the context as only one critic used that quote so saying multiple critics “commended the song for being” this way is a little misleading. I would save the quote for the body of the article,
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I can see that a lot of work has been put into it, but there are a few major issues. The main issues are the following: 1) the lack of support for several key pieces of information in the “Background and release” section, 2) the lack of structure in the “Critical reception” section, and 3) the
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underdeveloped aspects of the “Live performance” section. I will put this on hold for seven days and hopefully, we can work together on this, but this will need some work that goes beyond minor edits to get it into a condition necessary for a GA.
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This review has been on hold for a week, and there does not appear to be on feedback. The nominator has a message on their talk page that they are currently busy with school, and they have not been active for a while. I will have to
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Ideally, it would be great to have more information on these performances, such as the response to them. I am sure there were reviews of both tours, and I am sure at least one of them would mention this
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For this part ("Burnitup!" also charted in some countries), I do not believe the “also” is necessary so I would remove it. You already use “also” later in the same sentence anyway.
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