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Overall this is an engaging article which boasts a fitting comprehensiveness for an interesting figure. I enjoyed reading through it, and the scientific content was readable for a non-expert like me. I spotted a few minor issues with the prose, but nothing which may hold this article back. I'll leave
187:, citations in the lead should be minimal unless it's covering challengeable material. There are an abundance of citations in the lead which unfortunately clutter it - I would be bold and remove the majority of these or move them into the body of the article, if they aren't already in there 559:
I see that the comments have been addressed - I've looked through the article once more and am content that it meets the GA criteria now. It is written to a good standard, the references all check out and is comprehensive. Well done.
517:"It was because they were fascinated by St. John's Church, Kolkata that they frequently visited, Lokasundari for the music and Raman for the acoustics" - this reads awkwardly and could do with rephrasing 345:"The work inspired IACS to publish a journal Bulletin of Indian Association for the Cultivation of Science in 1909" - missing commas between 'journal' and 'Bulletin', and 'Science' and 'in' 294:"The inspection revealed that Raman would not withstand the harsh weathers of England" - did Raman have any pre-existing medical conditions? This wasn't mentioned in his early life section 80: 70: 47: 524:
It was because they frequently visited St. John's Church, Kolkata as Lokasundari was fascinated with the church music and Raman with the acoustics.
271: 126: 122: 52: 492:"(Married officers got additional INR 150.) " - this bracketed sentences breaks the flow of prose, either remove it or rephrase it 107: 75: 237:"The day is celebrated by the Government of India as the National Science Day every year" - would be better condensed as 156: 99: 501:. Mentioning this info may be important to understand the meaning of the extra allowance, which prompted the marriage. 530: 506: 481: 452: 431: 405: 384: 355: 334: 308: 283: 250: 226: 197: 468:"His wife later recounted (apparently jokingly) that their marriage was" - remove the brackets: 299:
No specific medical condition is mentioned, but he was known be of frail health; so a statement
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The first three paragraphs in the 'Later work' subsection begin with 'Raman', I would mix it up
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The day is celebrated annually by the Government of India as the National Science Day
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The extra allowance refers to an additional INR 150 for married officers at the time
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Raman often had poor health and was considered as a "weakling"
421:"published his findings quite prolifically " - remove 'quite' 216:
isn't here. It's best to be consistent, at least in the lead
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Complied; three citations for specific claims are retained.
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His wife later jokingly recounted that their marriage was
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