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42: 172:"Detroit-style pizza is a style of pizza developed in Detroit, Michigan." I know this is conventionally how we start articles, but this is so obvious I can't believe it. Perhaps think of a different way instead of saying A-style B is B from A. 405:"The restaurant later became Buddy's Pizza. Over the next several decades" later but when later as without that, we have no context for when the next several decades took place. 47: 80: 70: 197:"Small Detroit-style pizza from Green Lantern Pizza in Madison Heights, Michigan." no need to mention the restaurant and no period required as it's a fragment. 126: 122: 52: 107: 156: 99: 75: 222:
Lead doesn't need that single-sentence paragraph, an article of this brevity probably only needs one lead para (per
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Hm...can't find a date for the name change, but I've recast the following sentence, see what you think.
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I think I've finished all of these, thanks for the excellent input! LMK what else!
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All good, I made a couple of little tweaks, but now happy to promote.
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That's all I have for a quick run through. On hold for now. Cheers.
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done, but now it's a very complex sentence, see what you think
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Merge last two paras. Starting to become a bit proseline.
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at Bobby's Rendezvous rather than wait for the rename.
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Reception section is too "listy". Merge those paras.
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