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I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days. The prose is a little rough in some places, but I'm sure you can handle it. Overall the lead needs to be expanded and anything else I mentioned above too. The references are in excellent condition. If you have a any questions, please ask. Thanks!
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He played the role of a housemate on Bigg Boss (Season 1), as replacement for Salil Ankola
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