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More comments. I'm doing a bit of copyediting as I go, so please doublecheck me and make sure I'm not introducing new errors or changing the meaning. I won't be offended by any reverting. Broadly speaking, I would suggest that you do a top-to-bottom copyedit of this article in addition to mine; I'm
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715:"(On the Quantisation of the Perfect Monoatomic Gas)" -- Sometimes you follow Italian capitalization style in the English translations; here it appears to be English-style. I don't have a preference, but I'd suggest making these consistent. Not an issue for GA, though.
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This isn't an issue for the GA review, but you might consider reformatting the sections a bit; right now, the entire article text falls in sections 1. and 2. My suggestion would be to change the level-3 headers under "biography" to level-2
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I'll be glad to take this review. In the next few days, I'll start with a close readthrough, noting any issues here I can't easily fix myself, and then go to the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! --
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Whoops, was just starting a copyedit without realizing you were working on it, too--sorry if I edit-conflicted you. Take your time and I'll take a look tomorrow morn/afternoon. Cheers,
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