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Having been commissioned after being awarded the Distinguished Flying Medal in August 1942, he was sent to a training unit later that year; he returned to No. 73 Squadron in mid-1943 as its commanding officer and led the squadron, now operating Supermarine Spitfires, in operations over Italy until
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Near the end: "Buried at Marville-Les-Bois Communal Cemetery, near Dreux, according to the local priest who wrote to Joyce's mother after the war, the funeral was well attended by the local community." - what is according to the local priest? The burial site or the attendance?
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Make it clear that the 'two probably destroyed' at the end aren't included in the nine credited. Perhaps "nine enemy aircraft, in addition to two probably destroyed, and three damaged."
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provided alt text for images. Not sure about caption for infobox, it seems redundant given the photograph appears just beneath the name that appears at the top of the infobox.
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Lead - nice. Sentence "In late 1942 he was sent to a training unit for a time." is a little awkward, would suggest integrating with other sentences. Perhaps:
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Sources look good. Don't have access to all, but those that I do have look good, so AGF.
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thank you muchly for the review. My edits in response to your comments are
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Provide alts for the images. Caption too, if possible, for the infobox one.
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I have revised in accordance with this feedback, how is it now? Cheers,
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Trimmed down the usage of this term, only one instance of it now.
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Noticed a profusion of 'at the time' - may want to use it less.
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