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Sorry, missed that in the original comment. That's intentional. In the recording section I mention that "the stereo out two seconds earlier than the mono". The length of the mono is 2:32 and the stereo 2:30. The mono version is the one the vast majority of people were listening to in 1965, so I
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on reflection thinking that it probably does not qualify as fair use. I think the only way an image would qualify as fair use would be if it depicted John doing his elbow glissandos, but I haven't been able to find a good spot to screenshot that. Instead, I've moved John's quotation into a
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Agreed. I've rewritten the opening sentences slightly different than your suggestions; I think it's best to mention it being written by McCartney and credited to Lennon–McCartney in almost the same breath rather than in separate sentences. Let me know if you think they still need
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Everett, Lewisohn, Winn, et al., so I'm AGF). Consider: each of the Beatles and the instruments they played are identified in "Recording". The later "Personnel" section just repeats the info and isn't really needed (also possible
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I'll be reviewing this. On further reading, it appears rather straightforward, with only a couple of conflicting sources, so it should be OK. I usually work on a little at a time, so there is no time pressure.
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It's hard to get too specific, but I've included some more helpful info, namely that he moved into the house in
November 1963 and that by October 1964 he was still trying to write a "Long Tall Sally"-type
382:– I known what he's trying to say, but it may be confusing to some. Perhaps clarify that lacking a strong melodic component, the writer needs to build up other aspects to make it appealing.
461:– Since you've mentioned it, it may be helpful to explain the significance (Pollack's "it's an effect which retains the power to startle", since it's uncertain from the vocal itself).
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Great! Is there an image of them performing around the time? Or maybe use a quote box for a comment like Ringo's. It would help break up the text in the last sections.
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I'd prefer to keep the personnel section as I think it helps clearly delineate who plays what without the reader needing to piece it together by reading the body.
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