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The mention that the shipbuilding was delayed because of the earthquake (in the lead) reads odd. That can be remedied by introducing the information that "The construction of the ship began in Chile on 16 October 2007" or something along those lines. In that case the earthquake bit sounds reasonable.
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I tweaked the article a bit, feel free to revert whatever you feel necessary to. There's still the matter of "the second bid" which may need clarification (or not, depending on the answer to the question above) and the self-published bjorn.is source. In addition, I noticed the lead mentions ICGV
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After the first mention of a person (which should include first and last names and function/title etc), subsequent mentions of the same person should be made by last name unless the person has only patronymic - as most
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means that the ship sustained damage after it was placed in the dry dock. The source used to back the claim up says that the ship was placed in the dry dock two months after the tsunami (i.e. two months after it sustained damage) to survey damage. Please amend
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Granted, the ship's only two years old, but is it possible at all to say anything about its operational use - was it involved in any rescue or other type of mission that may warrant a mention in the article, or were the two years entirely uneventful?
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The first part of the "Construction" section is confusing. Were the bids submitted to the State
Trading Center, Ministry of Justice and Ecclesiastical Affairs or the ICG or a combination of any of those. Please reword to clarify.
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It's inappropriately poetic. I'm widely read and a decent
Scrabble player and I still had to look it up. If not for this mention here I would have already gone in and changed it, and I'm strongly tempted to do so --
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I suspect a lot of readers will need to consult a dictionary re "lethiferous" - if I were writing the article, I'd say "deadly" - then again, this is entirely up to you and has nothing to do with WP:GACR.
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In "2010 tsunami incident" subsection and "Delivery" section (possibly elsewhere, please check), Þór in the ICGV "Þór" should not be all-caps, should not be in quotation marks and should be italicized per
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I did some minor copyedits and wikilinking in the article. Please revert whatever you find messing up the matters. Please ask if you need any clarification re above raised issues. Nice article!--
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If the bids were placed consecutively, i.e. one after the other, then this is fine. If the bids were placed simultaneously, "the second bid" should be changed to "one of two bids". Which is it?--
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Given the propensity of maritime accidents, I would say events most likely occurred during this time period, however I know of no operation overtly mentioning the involvement of this vessel.
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should say who secured the contract, or omit the first part of the sentence altogether. If the sentence is truncated, consider merging it with the following one (this is in the lead).
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The infobox mentions the complement of 48, but the article prose does not. Please include some info on that. Perhaps it would be possible to say how many of those are officers etc?
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Absolutely not. On the other hand, if you have access to a source saying "Reykyavik is the only ICG base", it would be ok to report that using that specific reference.--
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Does the "State
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Why not say that the ship is 93.8 metres long instead of vague "nearly 94 m"? This applies to all units of measurements, if the sources provide more accurate figures.
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template to convert metric measurements to other types of units in order to enhance comprehension of the article in, well, English speaking audience of the Eng wiki.
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And just to make sure: was the ship in drydock when the tsunami struck the shipyard or was it placed in drydock after the tsunami (to inspect damage or whatever)?
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The ICGV Þór (Thor) is an UT 512L type offshore patrol vessel designed by Rolls Royce for the
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The "Design" section seems out of place - I'd suggest moving it ahead of "Construction" or merging the two to have "Design and construction" instead.
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Length of the ship in itself is a vague measurement. Can you check in the offered sources or elsewhere in additional sources if this measurement is
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There are most likely an abundance of prose peccancies and foibles such as this one, due to the fact that I comprehensively overhauled this article.
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The vessel does not carry a helicopter, it is simply able to refuel a helicopter while the helicopter is hovering. Added mention of the armament.
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I replaced it with "deadly", a synonym that's not archaich, and easily understood by
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