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Chicago Maternity Center. Perhaps rather than focusing so much on what he said or did, more emphasis could be given to how his actions shaped the profession. From just casual reading of the sources, choice aspects to highlight include his advocacy of strict sanitation guidelines/asepsis, he "pioneered the use of movies for medical teaching", and was "one of the earliest advocates of the lower segment Caesarean section, and he was the first obstetrician to insist on the use of face-masks in midwifery practice."
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In general, I think his influence should be discussed in more depth. For someone called both a father and a "titan" of twentieth century obstetrics, it seems underselling when this section discusses only his advocacy for forceps and episiotomy, his criticism of midwives in childbirth, the
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I've added some information about his influence, but in doing so, I came up with a slightly different layout that I think better balances the new lengths of the sections. Let me know what you think. I appreciate your careful reading and great suggestions so far.
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Beatrice Tucker, and especially her direct quotes, seem unbalanced and out of place in this biography, and doesn't speak much to DeLee's own influence.
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The third paragraph regarding infections in hospitals might fit better in "Influential physician", as it does seem to be one of the main things he's known for.
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I am happy to review this article. I've made some minor tweaks to references so far, but will hold off editing any further until I complete a thorough review.
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I think I have all of these covered now, with the exception of adding more influence information. I intend to tackle that part of it tonight.
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article about his invention of the fetoscope," - the name of the journal seems extraneous, especially for a paper not written by DeLee.
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I gave it a look-through and everything looks good. Since the reviewer never responded to multiple pings I'll close it myself.
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I realized that I forgot to ping you after addressing this feedback. Certainly no rush on my end though. Cheers.
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Thanks, Animalparty! I look forward to seeing your review and working together to improve this entry.
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