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This seems a little abrupt to me "The ship's air group was designed to consist of 27 aircraft, 15 Mitsubishi A7M Reppū (Allied codename: "Sam") fighters and a dozen Aichi B7A Ryusei ("Grace") dive/torpedo bombers." I presume this was after the decision was made to convert it to an aircraft carrier
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