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214:"Scully thought there was nothing more disappointing then on an expected snow day to wake up and finding out there was no snow, which constantly happened to him as a child." There are a number of problems with this sentence. "Then" implies an order of events, and "disappointing than" is needed here.
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The phrase "snow day to wake up and finding" is broken in a few ways. What constantly happened to Scully? That he thought there was nothing more disappointing? That he woke up? I know what it is supposed to mean, but the there clause is not clear enough to understand on first reading.
109:"When Principal Skinner calls all the Springfield Elementary students down for an assembly to tell them which subjects they are failing, Lisa discovers to her horror that she is failing gym class." The dependent clause is longer than the independent clause, which is difficult to read.
52:"In trying to salvage her gym grade, she finds she possesses a skill for hockey, and rivalry with Bart in the rink escalates into their home life and beyond, fueled considerably by parents and coaches." Unreadable, too many clauses.
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I'm starting a reassessment because the article was reviewed in a very short time. Upon reading it, I found several problems specific to the GA criteria. I am sure these problems can be fixed and the status restored in short order.
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Let me know if you need help addressing any of these issues or if you have any questions.
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Thanks for reviewing. I left some replies further up. --
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