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629:"Michael Frayn's play Copenhagen (1998), which was performed in London (for five years), Copenhagen, Gothenburg, Rome, Athens, and Geneva and on Broadway in New York, and won the Tony Award for Best Play in 2000, explores what might have happened at the 1941 meeting between Heisenberg and Bohr. Frayn points in particular to the onus of being one of the few to understand what it would mean to create a nuclear weapon. The play was adapted into a film." I would regard this paragraph as unnececssary detail, and WP:UNDUE. There is no need to add in that there was a play based on a meeting Bohr had in his life. The meeting formed a minor part of his life, there is no need for analysis in this detail of the meeting. Could you please remove it? 674:"These carried mail, freight and occasionally diplomatic personnel. Their flights, partly over enemy territory and frequently in poor weather, were often hazardous. Passengers on BOAC's Mosquitos were carried in an improvised unpressurised cabin in the bomb bay. Crew and passengers had to wear oxygen masks." These three sentences would constitute unneccessary detail, so I would ask that you compress it down into one, merely highlighting the danger of the BOAC flight, without going into such detail if thats ok with you 871: 798: 746: 701: 613: 592: 560: 531: 495: 437: 374: 896: 848: 42: 408:
It isn't neccessary to state it was his first wartime visit, that is obvious from information provided elsewhere in the article. As it is, the sentence is quite convoluted. If we cannot find a way to rewrite the sentence, I would recommend removing it, as it isn't detail critical to covering the
229:"The rise of Nazism in Germany prompted many scholars to flee their countries" This sentence doesn't really make sense. As a result of Nazism, people fled from their countries? Could you make it clearer, do you mean they fled from Germany? 511:
I have found that citation 90 is inaccurate, the source quoted (Hilberg's "The Destruction of the European Jews") does not discuss Niels Bohr at all, and should be removed from both the article and the 'References' section.
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I don't think it is neccessary to state how many years the play was performed for, or where it was performed. If you must keep it in the section, could you trim those bits out so as not to violate 3b please?
551:, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). 548: 383: 462: 80: 70: 815: 47: 466: 458: 390:" greeted on this, his first wartime visit to Britain" This bit isnt very concise, perhaps just change to "he was greeted warmly on his arrival"? 450: 637:. And for many people, Copenhagen is the first thing that comes to mind when the name Bohr is mentioned. But I've trimmed the section down. 633:
The problem is that this incident has generated a substantial body of literature in its own right, with books on the subject, like Segrรจ's
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Ok, I'm fairly sure the article is all good, i'll pass the article tommorow just incase I find anything else, thanks for the nom hawkeye
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Some fled from other countries. Fermi fled Italy; Teller fled Hungary; Placzek fled Czechoslovakia; Ulam fled Poland (good move that).
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Mainly because that is the name of the Knowledge article. But, on reflection, it isn't normal to link in the title.
719:"To prevent the Nazis" Please change to the Germans, or something similar, not all German scientists were nazis. 544: 446: 811: 622: 480: 759: 601: 517: 513: 394:
That would sound like they greeted him as he got off the plane, but in fact they did so in London.
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It is licensed under the GFDL, so it does not require a fair use rationale.
621:. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see 193:
I've outlined what needs to be done to make this GA quality below, thanks!
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Fair use rationale for File:Bohr-atom-PAR.svg? Could you please add one?
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Faust in Copenhagen: A Struggle for the Soul of Physics
134: 103: 414:Trimmed it back by removing the offending clause. 384:understandable to an appropriately broad audience 8: 30: 344: 61: 33: 7: 386:; spelling and grammar are correct. 844:Ok thats fine, I missed that sorry 382:. the prose is clear, concise, and 165:HI! 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