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Talk:SMS Undine/GA1

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190:"On the night of 17 November 1904, Undine collided with the torpedo boat S26 while on maneuvers just outside Kiel. S26, along with the rest of its unit, the IV Torpedo Boat Flotilla, was conducting a mock night attack on Undine. The cruiser was steaming with her lights off, and when the torpedo boats approached, she turned her search lights on, which blinded the crew of S26. She inadvertently ran in front of Undine, and the latter rammed and sank the former. One officer and thirty-two enlisted men aboard S26 were killed in the accident." I'd cite the first or second line there, I know its probably the same source, but for clarity. Or perhaps merge both sentences and cite it. Also the gender 'her/she' for ships is pretty standard, but the ship it references changes between sentences. First its Undine then its S26, I'd pick one as it ruins the flow. 42: 179:
Image check, it is listed in the public domain but the licensing section is requesting a US public domain tag I think for this picture. Come to think of it, its been on others before, but I know it is public domain. Still should be tagged... might want to recheck all the pages and images to be sure.
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The pronoun issue should be a bit clearer now. I feel like merging the sentences would make a monstrously long sentence, and as per my comment at the Frauenlob GAN, I really don't like repeating the same citation for multiple contiguous sentences (if that makes
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I agree with your mention of the inline citation above, the record is noted so it is probably fine. So it passed its GA.
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Otherwise no concerns. Putting it on hold for the fixes.
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