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341: 194: 632: 580: 557: 536: 711: 665: 510: 462: 417: 274: 42: 489:"Japanese Forces were alerted to the convoy's arrival shortly before daybreak on December 28th and quickly realized that if it could be destroyed, the U.S. forces on Mindoro would be essentially cut off from their supply line." - Once again, how do we know they didn't just say "Let's go and blow up some ships for the heck of it. 249:"Then suddenly, a huge pillar of fire shot skyward, followed by an immense cloud of white smoke. Then suddenly, a huge pillar of fire shot out of Burke's cargo hold, followed by an immense cloud of white smoke." - accidentally forgot to remove the old sentence when you revised it, or did two pillars of fire sprout up from the 700:
Alt's need some reworking. People who are reading about Liberty ships for the first time won't find much help from the "Ship at Sea" alt or compartment alt. I'd suggest "A colored diagram of compartments on a ship" for the compartment picture and am unsure about the Ship at Sea picture. Try to
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Sources 12 and 13 only backup the ship's complement (40 MM, 28 AG), not the fact that "the shock wave rocked the whole convoy..." (Source 14, however, does). Also, Source 13 gives 29 AG, while Source 12 gives 28. (11/12/2012: use Source
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Lots of stuff that needs working on. I'll give you an extra week of fixing time (3 weeks total). If most of this isn't fixed by then, I'll have to fail this nomination. I'll also try to fix some of the smaller grammatical errors soon.
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and anything and everything that was needed for the war effort and could carry a large number of troops, when equipped to do so. - and other things needed for the war effort. They could also be equipped to carry
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More printed sources would be nice (but I understand that it's a somewhat obscure topic, and that not that many books would be available) (11/13/2012: These sources probably should be incorporated into the
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Burke had been in service for two years and four days, and had traveled tens of thousands of miles hauling untold tons of cargo. - remove, not extremely necessary, and kind of flowery
203: 299: 80: 479:*"surprised at finding it without the expected air cover" - Probably correct, but we don't know for sure. Pilot didn't leave any last second thoughts behind, did he? 70: 47: 649: 303: 295: 287: 686:*Lead caption doesn't need attribution listed. "Ship at sea" might warrant some specification as to which ship at sea it was, why a picture of 126: 678: 398:
Source 14 gives the explosion at 1020 hours, while Source 4 gives it at 1013 hours (above my margin of error). Choose one (I'd go with 14).
253:? If so, I suggest trying to find a substitute for "Then suddenly," and specify in the first sentence where the pillar was sprouting from. 122: 52: 291: 567: 75: 107: 471: 641: 156: 99: 372:*Source 10 doesn't back up what is cited in the article (Source 11, however, does back up what is attributed to Source 10). 653: 426: 430: 367:
Source 8 doesn't seem to back up what is cited in the article. (11/12/2012: Use Source 14 instead for the second cite?)
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Using the color-coded image at the left, The machinery space (dark blue) - The machinery space (dark blue in picture)
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Source 14 does not state that the convoy made it to Mindoro. (11/12/2012: Unaddressed)
256:"October 1944 invasion force on the island of Mindoro" - link to the invasion article? 92: 756: 737: 701:
describe the color of the image, size of the ship, which way it's facing...
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while transporting its cargo of ammunition - could remove "its cargo of"
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Numbers in infobox should be cited (consider using Source 11)
311:*Might wanna consider removing the Aftermath header, see 312: 230: 134: 103: 259:"Today the fragments lay" - "Today the fragments lie" 204:understandable to an appropriately broad audience 527:*Anything else possible on the history section? 442:*Very few citations in the "History" section. 225:When using any sort of unit, remember to use 8: 236:Try to use past tense in the design section. 747:Majority of this has been addressed. Pass. 30: 164: 61: 33: 229:. 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