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A general thing I should advise is to archive the references. If this is too big a job to handle all at once, you can do it in stages, but as long as it happens, it will be fine. In addition to this, Ref 6 should use the original url or have its "work" link updated, Ref 22 is technically dead and
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A general point is the fact that, despite its obvious status as an alternate version of Rome to people who know Roman history, this is only mentioned in the development section. I think it should be mentioned in the league and plot section if
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