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671:, appreciate the review (and the ping—not sure why the bot skips me). I think I got everything. I had left a note on the talk page that I contacted the dev and am expecting images soon. I expanded the gameplay a little, though the sources really didn't say much more apart from its simple interactions. There is no formal release date for the game. I had a note in the infobox that the May Steam date appears wrong because journalists were reporting that the game was out in April. Smith also said he didn't have a browser version at first, so it magically shows up some time that year. "2009" works the best. I think it's normal to include the Release in the Development unless the Release is notable enough to warrant its own section. The "a toy" part should be fine since it's in the critic summary section. 475: 351: 263: 699: 415: 390: 294: 495: 455: 367: 310: 227: 326: 42: 601:
Some issues there are preventing this from meeting the GA criteria at this time, but I trust that you can handle it. It should be easy to make the lead summarize but the Gameplay section is looking a little dry and also the Legacy section is too short. The references look good, though. Please let me
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Can the gameplay/plot part of the lead be expanded a little? It doesn't give a overview of what the player is supposed to do for the reader. "The player advances through eleven rooms through interacting with each level's environmental objects" - what about the game's
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Would you consider renaming the "Development" section to "Development and release"? The last paragraph of the development is essentially about its release and sales which differs from actual development. Please feel free to ignore as I don't know if it
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Thank you for the improvements, czar! The article is looking better than before given that it has been expanded as much as possible and the lead now summarises. I forgot that this is considered an "old" app game, given that 2009 was six years ago(!).
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Gameplay section is looking a little dry. Are there no free use images that can be used to illustrate the gameplay? I have a feeling I took this GAN a little early as the section looks incomplete! Is it possible to
565:"Critics described Windosill as not just a game but "a toy" in itself." - should this be moved before Campbell and Rattray are introduced? The first paragraph of the reception section is usually there to summarize 558:"Windosill '​s first half was free-to-play and the second half could be unlocked with payment" - this sounds like it's in past tense. Was it made completely free-to-play at a later date? 754:, and congratulations on your 50th GA! I saw your educational GANs in the queue back when I was in the GA Cup, so I'll take a few of them soon. Funnily enough I remember seeing 544:
Smith's main inspirations in the development section are unreferenced. It's the part that ends with "Italian Renaissance painters Paolo Uccello and Piero della Francesca"
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There is very little on development in the lead section, given that the development section is the largest. At the moment the lead doesn't summarize the article
445: 257: 47: 734:, thanks! I think this is actually my 50th GA, with much credit to your reviews. I have a few book articles sitting at GAN, if you're interested... 575:
The Legacy section is too short, can it either be expanded or merged with the reception section as a level 3 header? I did a similar thing to
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lying around in my college library but I've never read it. I'll take that one first and will review a few more soon
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I haven't took a video game GAN in a while. I'll finish this soon, but please let me know if you need more time
524:" - do you know what month/date it came out? It's just that app games' releases are usually more precise 639:
I notice that the GA bot didn't give you a notification, I've pinged you so you can hopefully see this
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know if you need more time or have any questions; I look forward to hearing your reply!
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his own 3D and physics code" - code overload. Would it sound better with
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