213:"From January '76, when all the former Beatles' contracts with EMI/Capitol expired, and with only Paul McCartney choosing to re-sign with Capitol, the two record companies were free to license releases featuring songs from the band's back catalogue and the individual members' solo work, without the need for artist's approval." very long sentence, takes a while to basically say that once their contracts expired the record companies were free to license previous material, try and trim it down
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225:"Nevertheless, after what the record company had promised would be "the largest selling campaign in the history of the music business", the recycled product was a major commercial success." too many redundant words are used in this sentence seems to be a problem throughout. Change to "After the record company had promised "the largest selling campaign in the history of the music business", the album was a commercial success."
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325:"Regarding the controversial choice of tracks, but rather missing the issue of what had passed as a hit song on Lennon's best-of compilation and the additions permitted on Starr's..." this sentence reads as if it should be part of an essay, this should not be the case in an encyclopaedia, there is no argument to be made, just present what is said
259:"In this way, "landmark" songs such as "Within You, Without You" and "The Inner Light" were overlooked." This is confusing, due those three songs feature Indian songs, for a reader who is not aware of Harrison's work, this sentence is baffling. You're assuming the reader has prior knowledge of Harrison's work, which is not always the case.
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288:"Some sources give the UK date as 14 January 1977, however, implying that the Harrison compilation was delayed there to make way for the release of The Beatles' Magical Mystery Tour − an album cobbled together by Capitol in 1967 but a consistent seller overseas on import ever since." Too many
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Ouch! Thanks for your comments, NapHit. Will reply more fully on your talk page perhaps. PS: "kissing the same book"?! Cheers,
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