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The article meets length and date criteria and is well cited. I've rechecked for close paraphrasing after some reworking of the highlighted sections and am (fairly) confident that any similarities now are acceptable as the listing of bare facts. The hook is interesting (to me anyway) and short enough
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I've done that for the first two, I admit defeat for the last - they are pretty much just bare facts. In reworking the Mobile Lab bit, I changed it to Ford arriving in the Middle East rather than the lab, which may have been there already. My (admittedly imperfect) understanding of close paraphrasing
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No, that is fine! Thank you very much for your help. I am pretty certain that he arrived in the Middle East with 1MBL, so I changed to wording slightly.
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