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happened to be his...refused to allow him to use or buy back his previously recorded material", or "one week later he was admitted to the hospital after a tumor had been discovered that turned out to be malignant" with "One week later, he was admitted to the hospital after a tumor had been discovered that turned out to be malignant", or "Universal consented to release its claim on the music and turned it over to his family who with the help of friends and fans organized a network to lobby for the promotion and release of this long-delayed material" with "Universal finally consented to release its claim on the music and turned it over to his family. Through Josh’s website, family, friends and fans organized a network to lobby for the promotion and release of his long-delayed material".
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I have just reverted SL93's rejection of this nomination, since just as nominators should not promote the nominations they propose, the same applies to rejections. Frankly, I like the story of this album and think it would be nice to feature it in DYK; as SL93 doesn't wish to, I'd like to take on the
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This is not just an issue for DYK. Encyclopedia articles are supposed to be written in standard written
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I never said that it was only a DYK issue, but I still don't want to try to fix the concerns raised for a fact on the main page. Since this a site-wide issue and my rewording is such a bother, I could simply revert my edits and place a close paraphrasing tag on the article because I was not the one
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You know how some language is fancy and formal? Vernacular is different: think of it as how friends talk when no one is listening. Vernacular language includes slang and obscenities. One of the hardest things about writing for school is getting away from the vernacular and learning to write in more
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I just went to take a look, and found the first paragraph under
Background and recording to be confusingly written, with unclear antecedents and a difficult-to-puzzle-out event sequence. It's also without an inline source citation, which should have been addressed in the original review. There are
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Clayton-Felt’s, and refused to allow him to use or buy back his previously recorded material" with "by purging contracts, one of which
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Excuse me for assuming competence on your part. (I've encountered users here who are insulted when other users don't assume that they are competent. It's rare for someone to complain that they were assumed to be able to do things they are incapable of.) Anyway, here's a good explanation of
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I have done a copy edit based on what was already there. I have not looked at the sources, so this may or may not address potential close paraphrasing issues, but I do believe the prose is now encyclopedic in tone and style.
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Nice job on the revision, EdChem. The article language is encyclopedia-like -- and it's more interesting reading than the previous version. Hook is still properly supported by citations; I judge this one to be good to go.
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This is not a self-nomination so I call it quits. I would have fixed the issues, but I am annoyed that people can't seem to grasp the concept of correctly explaining their problems. This nomination can be closed.
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ALT1 is fine. I'm giving you co-creator credit, EdChem, in view of all your work on this. Too bad that SL93 opted out -- he definitely deserves credit for starting the nomination and working on the article.
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I have removed the DYKnom credit template per your request. The mention of the nomination will remain on the template for bookkeeping purposes only, to make it clear this wasn't a self-nomination.
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What do you mean by "some awkward wording and sentence structure" and what is "vernacular conversational style"? I haven't went through such a copy edit discussion ever since my Good
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Well, I agree that I should. I botched up the copy edit, but this album does have an interesting story behind it. I added the DYKnom template back, but I hope that no one objects.
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What does vernacular conversational style even mean? I am trying to not get annoyed, but I would be within my rights to be annoyed when things are not being explained.
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The issue was in the first section. I reverted my edits and placed a close paraphrasing tag on the article. Anyone is free to revert what I did if they want to.
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December of 1999.", for example. As long as the article has been pulled back for other issues, now's an excellent time to improve its text.
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