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The primrose path to perdition is accepting the word of a fellow course member as a genuine critique of your work. They have as little expertise here as you do. Some of the evidence is that they have not signed their comment. While criticising the work of others may be part of your course assignment,

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is a good place to get started figuring out what that should look like. In short, the lead is supposed to provide a brief summary of the major points of the article. A reader should be able to read the lead and get a sense of what the article is about. The first sentence should be a brief statement

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Unfortunately, I did not manage to get it onto the main space. My 4th submission, which I had high hopes for it being accepted due to my compliance with an experienced editor's suggestions was put on hold. The reason cited was that it would not be reviewed until the "issue" with our course had been

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With regard to your references, your course leader seems not to have guided you, or you have missed that guidance. Ideally please add links to online versions of the references. This is not compulsory, but we write for ordinary readers who like the instant gratification of being able to see what is

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The purpose of automation is to improve performance and efficiency by easing a pilot’s workload to reduce the possibility of human error. While humans today have access to much more information than they previously did, our cognitive abilities required to process that information has not increased

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There are some issues here. A wikipedia article is very different from an ordinary class project. We do not require the article to be self contained. Instead it must Wikilink to other concepts. I agree that this does. However it also discusses the material, seeming to reach conclusions. We may not

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One of the problems with offering a second review on the same topic is that one stands too close to the draft, and may either be too pedantic or not pedantic enough.. I have found through rather longer experience than I care to mention that a different pair of eyes almost always produces the best

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run on sentence: Research reveals that while the highly automated aircrafts of today are much safer than those of yesterday, there is still a significant need for improvement. Namely in the field of training pilots to better understand, use and respond to the automated systems, especially during

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run on sentence: A relevant example is the crash of Air New Zealand’s flight 901 into Mount Erebus, caused by the input of incorrect data into the navigation system after a route change. The pilot failed to independently verify the accuracy of the new flight plan (26 nautical miles off-course),

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Please talk to your course leader. They have resources to guide them in guiding you. We make no special allowances for class assignments when they get accepted as articles, and adapting to our style is tough. This is why we organise special education

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refers to ." In the second sentence, perhaps you could explain why this is important, and continue from there hitting the main points that you cover in the article. You're probably looking about a paragraph, maybe two.

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Although there are benefits, automation has ushered in a new set of potential flight hazards ranging from fatal data input errors to significantly increased head-down time during key phases of flight.

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I suspect you need to criticise the work as if you knew about editing Knowledge (XXG), not simply as a generic class assignment. YOUr course leader needs to guide you all rather differently.

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outcome for the eventual article. IT may be disappointing, but I will decline your kind invitation. This will not, your professor assures me, affect any final grading. They recognise that

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As for my contribution, I wrote the entire article myself; I was hoping that it would be published so that the article could receive contributions from other editors and grow over time.

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The great big photograph may be pretty, but it is intrusive. I failed to spot the start of the article because of it. Please thumbnail pictures. Those interested can click them.

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Very good detailed article. There's a little bit of repetition and a lot of detail that you might want to cut out but still a very good article.

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This leads to increased ‘head-down’ time during an already high workload phase of flight. Explain head-down time or link to an explanation.

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due to the requirement for additional monitoring and computer programming of electronic flight instrument systems.

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has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by SwisterTwister was:

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has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by RadioFan was:

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has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Timtrent was:

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has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Timtrent was:

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has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Mr. Guye was:

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And, while you are crafting that, please do attempt links to online versions of the references

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Over-reliance and Over-trusting automation can lead a pilot to lose situational awareness

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Hi Melbushr. I think one important thing that your draft still lacks is a lead section.

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at

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for most readers to understand. Please make it easier to understand. I also cite

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This looks more like a report rather than a formal encyclopedia article. Cheers,

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page.

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presumably because they blindly trusted the automated system.

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Here is the link to my article on aviation automation:

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