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384:"instead, three of the five turrets were mounted on the centerline, with two of them arranged in a superfiring pair aft" ... confused here - is that two of the three or the OTHER two that are left after the three mounted on the centerline? I gather from the next sentence that it's the first option, but a bit more clarity might help here. 186:
to grace the illustrious FAC page, so hopefully she can join her sister ships and advance another step toward turning the GT into an FT. I wrote this article a couple of years ago, it passed GA in January 2011, and a MILHIST ACR in August last year - hopefully not too much dust has gathered while
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it's waited for me to have the free time to put it up for FAC. I look forward to working with reviewers in ensuring this article meets the criteria for Knowledge (XXG)'s best work. Thanks in advance to all who take the time to review the article.
119: 456:"In the course of the battle, Prinzregent Luitpold fired one-hundred and sixty-nine 30.5 cm shells and one-hundred and six 15 cm rounds." Any reason you used ordinals here instead of numerals? 238:
Having the description after the construction, and before the service history is a bit jarring to me. Wouldn't moving the construction section into the service history make it flow better?
213: 176: 369:"commissioned into the fleet" - I presume the German High Seas Fleet? Can we linkie? Oh, I see we link in the next paragraph, any reason why? Could we say "navy" instead? 40: 90: 85: 94: 77: 432:"portions of the Grand Fleet" - I presume the Grand Fleet was British? Linkage? Oh, wait, you link it a bit further down, should be at first mention. 546: 30: 17: 459:
I was under the impression that using two sets of numerals was bad practice (since 169 30.5 cm could be somewhat hard to read, for instance).
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Move horsepower and boilers to installed power line in infobox. Why are the types of armor bolded? They should all probably be linked.
140: 485:"and their crews were reduced to 200 officers and men." Is that per ship? I'm pretty sure it can't be for the entire fleet... 358: 81: 496:
Looks very good, just a few spots where I was unsure of some stuff. Be happy to support when these are taken care of.
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What make sure to add states to publisher locations. What country are Oxford and Barnsley in?--
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Admiral Friedrich von Ingenohl, the commander of the High Seas Fleet. Admiral von Ingenohl
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has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see
510: 309: 268: 217: 188: 159: 524: 497: 463: 348: 330: 111: 245: 564: 394:"torpedo tubes, all mounted in the hull." forward, midships, aft? Or spread out? 409:"The ship again went..." But we haven't said it went to Kiel Week before this.. 523:
Happy to support on prose and comprehensibility to the non-military person.
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Does specifying the location of the 3rd centerline turret make it clearer?
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Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in
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Ed fixed the page ranges, and yes, Gröner is a translated work.
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Link diesel engine, steam turbine, turret, Amrun Bank, Behncke
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Gröner: is this a translated work or is it German-language?
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Works for me. I was more curious than anything else...
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Be consistent in whether page ranges are abbreviated
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