646:. If you want to know specific information about this articles references I can elaborate on them for you, but it is all pretty much there in the references section. If you ask a more direct question about the references in this article I will be glad to answer it. The frequency of citation is a good indication of the primariness of the reference, or the amount this article is indebted to each source. As for inline cites they are used in abundance in recently promoted articles, looking at some of them now with your question in mind, I don't see any that have references separated and classified as primary and secondary. I understand the reasoning for this to be that separating sources rather than linking them in line could create confusion as the text evolves and imply that they apply to the entire text and to what other may writers contribute at any given time. Using inline citations is more exact as to 'who said what'. Such is the nature of Knowledge, it is collaborative, and if someone else adds information, it might appear to be attributed to any of the references listed in a separate list, when it may or may not be. Using inline cites relates the facts directly to the sources, and can even give page numbers for attribution and further reading. Regards,
626:, I would request or ask the reason for not seperating your primary references into a seperate section. As it stands the research literature used for this subject is merged with the citations making it hard to identify whether the sources were used for the sake of putting a citation near a couple sentences or if they were responsible for most of the text. With this the reader might know if there are more/better sources for the subject that can be incorporated, whether the sources are reliable according to his/her own research and/or the reader can see which books deal heavily with the subject if he/she wishes to pursue further reading. Thank you.
412:"Although Lenin was not an enthusiast for avant garde art, projects were made at Vkhutemas, and by faculty and students in his honor and to further his politics." - confusing passive voice. Try "Although Lenin was not an enthusiast for avant garde art, Vkhutemas faculty and students made projects to honor him and further his politics."
787::**Thanks Tony, I'll have a look tonight (D.Recorder is on vacation). As far as I know, the main contributors are American and British (excepting NVO who's Russian I think) - what do you mean 'native speakers' - Russian or English? "Read about single and double quotes" - do you mean quotation marks or quotations from people? --
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Ideas awkwardly jammed into this sentence: "Constructivism was developed as an art form in graphics and sculpture, but it had architecture or construction rather as the underlying subject matter, and was present throughout the school." "But" is a problem. So is "rather". The last point doesn't run
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Hello. I see this is a broader issue than this particular candidate page can resolve. I don't see your question as specific to this article, as what you are noticing is customary with current featured articles so may be applied to any of them. You can see this by viewing them on the main page, and
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This article is about a
Russian design school from the 20s. Many thanks to everyone who has contributed to it so far. I feel that this article meets the criteria for featured article, and if not, will do so by the end of this FAC. Thanks in advance for your comments. Regards,
329:"A tendency towards working, functional designs with luxuries minimized resulted from this push for design economy." More confusing passive voice. Change to "This push for design economy resulted in a tendency towards working, functional designs with minimized luxuries. "
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Fixed. I think there's some question mark about exatly what
Rossine was teaching in this part of the course - I've replaced it to read "In the early 1920s this basic course consisted of the following: ... 8) tutelage by Wladimir Baranoff-Rossine"
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Replaced with two sentences - "Whilst constructivism was ostensibly developed as an art form in graphics and sculpture, it had architecture and construction as its underlying subject matter. This influence pervaded the school."
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Thanks for your prompt response - I've replaced my 'whilst's with 'while's (my old english teacher has a lot to answer for) and standardised the captions. What needs to happen to move your 'cautious neutral' to 'rapturous
669:. It's an interesting and worthy article on an unusual subject. I'd like to see it succeed, but it's not well enough written yet. Seek help from native speakers in this field. Here are random samples of problems.
191:"school was reorganised which included a" - slightly off grammatically. The word "which" should relate back to a noun antecedent, but there is none here. So you have to say, "school was reorganized -- a
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I implemented what you suggested, thank you for such a thorough reading. I asked for clarification from other editors on one item I was unsure of and for more explanation of why
Melnikov quit abruptly.
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An important part of the new teaching method which was developed at
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153:: This is a generally well-written article. The research and coverage are good. But it seems that there are primarily some grammar and copy editing (and few MOS things) that need a little work.
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Excellent, erudite and interesting article. I wonder if the lead might expand slightly on "It was dissolved in 1930" - this seems a little abrupt and a little flavour of the 'why' might help. --
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other candidates on the candidate page. For a general discussion on the virtues of different methods of referencing and how they relate to featured articles, you might get a better response at
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A preliminary basic course was an important part of the new teaching method that was developed at
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This sentence: "Under this reorganization the 'artistic' content of the basic course was reduced to one term, when at one point it was two years." appears twice in the paragraph.
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It was dissolved in 1930, after numerous political pressures in the later years. The school's faculty, students, and legacy were dispersed into as many as six other schools.
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Better; surprised you like "whilst" rather than the plain, modern "while". Some of the captions aren't real sentences, and MOS says not to use a period in those cases.
700:"Akin to the Bauhaus' basic course at which all first year students had to attend"—The apostrophe looks very odd. Try "s's" if you need one at all. You don't attend
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I elaborated on this and added more context so it wasn't jolting.
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