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Barefoot Olympian (2009)' before you comment on it. I.e 'Bikila: Ethiopia's Barefoot Olympian' was directed by and released in 2009. According to Tim Lewis, it is a more journalistic and less forgiving biography...'
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which is entirely my addition. Please also reassess the articles rating under the relevant WikiProjects.
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