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So looking at the sources, they seem to be reliable. Kotaku, Engadget, Destructoid check out. Though, unless its in a different language other than English, you don't have to add in the pipe what language it is. Especially since Engadget is in English and not Turkish. Also the subreddit in the
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Nice piece overall. Its pretty well-written and easy to follow. There are places that could use more detail, if good sources are available. Other than that I wish we had an image or two, but maybe no free ones are available. Keep up the great work!
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This article is short because it is on a simple game, but I would still like some feedback after rewriting it to weed out the poor-quality content, before nominating it for good article status.
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How about, "Agar.io has received a generally positive reception"? Although words like "generally" are too vague to be all that helpful, so it would be even better to avoid it altogether.
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if it is copyrighted, as it is simple enough to click on the external link to the game. I have doubts over if the design is even original enough, though.
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I'm not sure this is the best way to phrase this, but I'm drawing a blank. I'll think about it and get back to you if I think of something better.
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Rewritten simply as "Valadares said to Kafakutu that he was a player of the game Spore, which he cites as an inspiration for Agar.io".
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Might be nice to flesh this out a little more for the casual reader who might not have ever played this game, or games like it.
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Avoid "according to" when you can; how about, "Valadares told Kafakutu magazine that he was a player of the game Spore"?
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Rewritten as "Players can split a part of their cell, flinging one of the split cells at the direction of the cursor".
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I'll take a look at this soon. I recommend getting a screenshot of the gameplay to illustrate how it looks.
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In an interview with Sergio Varanda, head of mobile at Miniclip, the main goal of the mobile version was to
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According to an interview conducted by Kafakutu, Valadares said that he was a player of the game Spore
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The mobile versions also received the same positive reception, but was criticized for unwieldiness
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You linked 4chan in the lead, so link it once again on the first occurrence after the lead.
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The second paragraph of this section needs to be sourced. As of now it has no citations.
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This is a little rough. How about, "Sergio Varanda, head of mobile at Miniclip,
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Cells can be split with the split cell launched at the direction of the cursor.
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Agar.io was first announced on 4chan on April 28, 2015 by Matheus Valadares
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I used "Agar.io was released to a positive critical reception" instead.
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Although it was pretty much popular overnight; quickly seems fine.
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Among game critics, Agar.io received positive critical reception.
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I used "Agar.io was released to a positive critical reception"
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How about, "Game critics gave Agar.io a positive reception"?
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I'd drop "In the game" and just say "player's control ..."
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Thanks for the feedback, comments and changes are above.
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Because "versions" is plural, "was" ought to be "were".
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Esquivalience
18:30, 6 August 2015 (UTC)
GamerPro64
16:31, 7 August 2015 (UTC)
WP:NFCC
Esquivalience
21:19, 7 August 2015 (UTC)
GamerPro64
21:41, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
Esquivalience
23:15, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
RO

22:11, 26 August 2015 (UTC)

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