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I've reworded it to "Early in 2003, Beyoncé collaborated with Sean Paul during the late stage for the recording of her debut solo album
Dangerously in Love." If its awkward, tell me so that I will revert it and add "with". Yeah, its fine. I always have trouble when it comes to fixing POVs. Anyway, do
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No, I mean that the grammar seems wrong. "Baby Boy" is singlular, so the verb in the quote after it should be singular ("comes off...", not "come off..."). If the original quote has a plural subject, then the quote would be OK (all of her songs "come off...") but when used here add an s in square
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There are just a number of places where it needs someone more familiar with the subject and with good copyediting skills and a fresh eye to go over it. One trick you can try yourself is to print out the article and read it out loud - often our ears will catch what our eyes miss. Hope this helps
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John Reed of Music Critic noted that "Baby Boy" "come off as very beguiling with its
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Otherwise the sources look pretty decent. Note I didn't look at the prose or pictures, just sources, since you wanted comments on those. The above are things I would have asked at FAC.
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Question sentence above - I think I would word it "Early in 2003, Beyoncé collaborated with Sean Paul during the late stages of recording her debut solo album
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The R&B-dancehall song was written by Beyoncé, Scott Storch, Sean Paul, Robert Waller and Jay-Z for the singer's debut solo album...
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It is obvious a lot of work has been done and I think the article will be quite good once the language is cleaned up.
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The song always appeared in public performances by Beyoncé, and was later honored as the Most
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