229:"Inspired by Bal Gangadhar Tilak" A world audience may not know who Tilak is. So I suggest adding description "Inspired by Indian independence activist Bal Gangadhar Tilak" or similar to add some context as done in "Indian freedom fighter P. Varadarajulu Naidu". Similar description is needed for V. O. Chidambaram Pillai et al
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Governor of West Bengal 1947–1948, In Nehru's Cabinet, 1965 Anti-Hindi agitations in Madras, 1967 elections etc. I suggest merging sections to have longer sections to avoid a long
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