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I've listed this article for peer review because I was thinking of nominating it for GA status as it is very thorough on the events that went on during the nearly year of the stage of the conflict this represents. It is now over. Also there is a dearth of Afria-related GA articles. It would be nice
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I don't understand the following: "the writ of the state has apparently been effected with a prevalence of "insecurity" as a result of the proliferation of armed groups". I think the technical term for such writing is gobbledygook. "writ of state"? "apparently"?, "prevalence of
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Pairing "essentially" with a specific day is confusing, but I think the lead sentence needs a complete revision that will eliminate that construction as a matter of course.
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