464:"urban vinyl toy" (do we want readers to remain confuse or to wander off to that urban vinyl article and forget about this Drake)? Were the figures all sold out? How does "it appears there's Drake, Hellboy Drake, Berlin Nightclub Drake and Radioactive Drake" relate to reviewers' lack of enthusiasm over the toys (and why "reviewers" when only a Kotaku blogger is cited)?
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There is a lack of encyclopaedic context (importance) to this section; it could be due to the way it is written. I could easily just say "so what?" How does the advertising and a toy of Drake's gun relate to this character's notability? Is "action figure" not a better and more understood term than
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I think there is an overwhelming use of quotes that, seriously, could be pared down. Summarise the reviewers' opinions, using one or two of the more outstanding quotes. Throwing a flood of them makes it a corny read—not really
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Please rephrase. The current sentence makes it a fact that clothing a character in t-shirt and jeans would encourage players to relate to the character. This is just their goal, not a fact; i.e. "Aiming to
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