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I've listed this article for peer review because… I feel that it can be brought up to
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The intro is very well written, and does a nice job of summarizing the whole article. If the main content is written like the intro, the I'm very excited to read the rest of the article, though I probably won't be able to get much done tonight in terms of comments, kind of want to work on getting
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