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You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC. The sourcing looks good. Long time no see Dr Who at FAC! (I almost bought some used Dr Who magazines the other day when
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You be careful, because your song is ending, sir. It is returning, it is returning through the dark. And then Doctor... oh, but then... he will knock four times
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The Doctor and
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Russell T Davies co-wrote the episode with Gareth
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