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579: 512: 379: 154: 353:"When Leonardo gets annoyed that Raphael is asking for money again, Raphael weeps that he's got to stop betting on golf which he doesn't watch." Change to something like "Raphael asks for some money, which Leonardo gets annoyed at him for. Raphael weeps that he should stop betting on golf that he does not watch." 834:
I was slightly skeptical to review this at first, due to the fact that it's currently at Start-class. I think that, if a GA reviewer was to see that, they would be more concerned with the article. For now, I think it would be best to get the article through the different classes, up to B, to stand a
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anchor Valerie Webber (Nwodim) interviews her colleague, the COVID-positive Sutter (Day) who is at home in quarantine with his daughter who is also COVID-positive, via a remote video feed from his daughter's smartphone." This is quite a mouthful! Try splitting the sentences
685:, "General note for each of the "episode" sections: remove the "in the first/second/third episode" part in the heading." If we do that, then there will be repeat headings, which directly contradicts 741:, Thumbs up emoji. Thanks for doing all this review! I put a decent amount of work into it (along with several other editors), so having it refined into something even better is appreciated. ― 496:"...members of Sandler's and Pete Davidson's families make non-speaking appearances in the sketch. Considering the context, there should be a comma between "families" and "make". 126: 122: 107: 268: 796:, I think you mean GA? But yes, probably--the bar for GA is not terribly high. I'm a little close to the content, tho, so it's hard for me to be objective. ― 262:..." When it says that the WHO announced the beginning of the pandemic, are you referring to when they declared it a pandemic. If so, the wording is unclear. 99: 76: 237:
Would you mind checking that all of the info in the lead is in the body as well? I think I see some examples of the lead having more info than the body.
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video reviewing movies that were out before the quarantine." This sentence feels awkward in my opinion. I think it should be rewritten.
316:..." Two things: 1. Remove "simply". 2. Change the second part to something like "...the cast members joining their Zoom meeting..." 115: 434:) is too busy singing his theme song to interview them. Accompanying Cole in upstaging the guests are Vance the Track Suit Guy ( 532: 276: 69: 905: 885: 850: 823: 788: 768: 733: 716: 677: 631: 607: 205: 183: 831:, whoops, I did mean GA. I managed to get this confused with another article that I'm trying to get to FA. But no matter! 902: 847: 785: 730: 674: 628: 604: 202: 44: 876: 814: 759: 707: 92: 301:
General note for each of the "episode" sections: remove the "in the first/second/third episode" part in the heading.
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Ref 2: There is a date for April 11, 2020. Where did that come from? It's not the access date, that's April 12.
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Ref 12: Is it possible to change the citation to something accessible worldwide? I'm not able to see the clip.
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are a pastor and choir director..." I think the word "respectively" should be added at the end of this phrase.
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Ref 36 and 38: Kinda picky, but the casing of the letters is different between the citation and the article.
620: 596: 194: 179: 17: 451: 545:"...since the school's other choices pulled out." Given the context, this part does not make sense. 893:, fair enough. If you do decide to nominate (or review) the article for GA, I wish you good luck! 462:) who sings "Merlot for One"." This whole paragraph seems too informal. I would suggest a rewrite. 548:"...an annoying couple who has smuggled personal protective equipment..." Change "has" to "have". 419: 490: 427: 259: 858:, Everything sub-GA is just arbitrary. I'm changing it to "B" now because I think it's "B". ― 466: 175: 319:"...who all perform from the comfort of their homes..." Remove the phrase "the comfort of". 872: 810: 755: 703: 411: 407:"...who all perform from the comfort of their homes..." Again, remove "comfort of their". 552: 478: 435: 431: 337: 290:
had also been infected by coronavirus but recovered." Change "had also been" to "were".
367:"...that showcases dating in the age of quarantine..." This phrase feels too informal. 930: 499:"Villaseñor has a not-so-smooth date with an imaginary guy." This seems too informal. 459: 241: 665:
That's everything I found. Feel free to respond to these comments in your own time.
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That's everything I could find prose-wise. I'll dive into the refs in a few days.
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I've listed this article for peer review because it has the potential to be a GA.
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Critical reception of the first episode & ratings of the first episode
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who gives poor cosmetology advice." This article has already been linked.
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I could be wrong about all of this, but that's how I think it works.
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Recap:". This phrase, however, does not show up anywhere else.
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There's only 39 refs, so I'll look at them all. Here we go!
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Ref 15: At the beginning of the title, there is an extra "
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Live (kinda) from all across America, it's Saturday Night!
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passed away." Add a "has" between "Shredder" and "passed".
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was a single episode. Is there a way to change that?
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