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I have made some tweaks per your suggestions. I haven't gone as far as you suggested, because the multiple rankings are something that a lot of reviewers mention, but I've trimmed it. I've also swapped the order of the sections. The sentence you point to is a generalization, but it is also an
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Starting with the lead the paragraphs could be reorganized. For example, the first paragraphs talks about the premise, the second and the third could be trimmed and merged, whereas the last could talk about the reception without going too far about all the
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would remove the reference from the lead. Also, you could a bit of creation in the lead next or before the reception. The reason why I said if you could leave the characters next to the setting and plot is that all of that is in-universe information.
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References are normally avoided in the FAs I've seen in their lead and infoboxes. I would only keep them if I am quoting something or I'm writing controversional info that other users might change.
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What surprised me about reception is that while it is well written, it has no mentions of sales. I would question them if I were reviewing the article.
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