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I've listed this article for peer review because I want feadback on the grammar and content of the article with the aim being nominating this article for good article status.
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Soprano range: The soprano is the highest female voice. The typical soprano voice lies between middle C (C4) and "high C"(C6).
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You might want to find a model article that is FA or GA to follow for style, possibly stucture and other ideas.
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and other cite templates. Internet refs need url, title, publisher, author if known, and access date. see
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The soprano is the highest female voice and typically lies between middle C (C4) and "high C"(C6).
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Many vocal pedagogists warn of the dangers of quick identification.
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