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It achieved worldwide success by topping ten charts including in the UK, Ireland, Italy and
Switzerland. – You say charts but then you state countries not the chart, A better way of saying it is “It achieved worldwide success by topping the charts in ten countries, including in the UK, Ireland, Italy
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I know I have been kind of picky but I have seen the drama involving FA noms and to avoid this drama, simple mistakes like the ones above should not be brought up during the actual nomination process. After you have dealt with some of these problems and have gone pack to look at it, I`ll continue.
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Rowland's native country of the United States the single was successful, topping both the Hot Dance Airplay and Hot Dance Club Songs charts, as well as reaching number seventy-six on the Billboard Hot 100. – I wouldn’t say it was successful. You can say it was successful on dance airplay but not
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In Guetta's native France, "When Love Takes Over" debuted on the French
Digital Chart at number fourteen and the French Singles Chart at number two. It peaked on the Digital Chart at number three on 18 July 2009. – first sentence should say something like “In Guetta's native France, "When Love Takes
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Other than that, everything looks good. I suggest you can somebody who has been involved with an actual FA to edit this some more so they can point out other problems if there is. For the most part though, this article is very well written and with some more improvements it could possibly become
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The song was nominated for the Best Dance
Recording at the 52nd Grammy Awards ceremony. It lost out to "Poker Face" by Lady Gaga. The song's Electro Extended Remix was successful at the ceremony, winning Guetta his first Grammy Award for the Best Remixed Recording, Non-Classical.- not relevant to
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Before I do more in depth editing I strongly advise you too look at the
Commercial and Music Video Sections, for commercial you should try re-wording some things and taking irrelevant stuff out, as well for the Music Video section try finding some criticism but if you can`t no big deal.
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Digital Chart at number fourteen and then climbed to a peak of number three on the week of 18 July 2009.” Then second should say “ On the French Singles Chart it debuted and peaked at number two.” Or something around these lines
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Additionally song earned Guetta two Grammy Award nominations for "Best Dance
Recording" and "Best Non-Classical, Remixed Recording", the latter of which the song's extended electro remix won. – comma after Additionally and a the is needed before
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The duo then performed together around the world, including on the UK daytime variety show, This
Morning on 18 June 2009 - you just stated that the promotion began in the UK then they went around the world but then you stated promotion in the
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The song's lyrics carry a message of the euphoria one feels when in love with a significant other. It bares some similarities to
Coldplay's 2002 hit single, "Clocks". - I thought that the similarity was between the production not the
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The song reached top ten in other regions, except in Brasil and Canada. – try saying something like ``In most other countries, the song reached the top ten, except for in Brasil and Canada``, also it didn’t reach top ten in the
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Most noted the addition of Rowland's powerful and emotionally-charged vocals which make the single the most memorable song from One Love. – scrap "which make" and put "made"
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The single was successful elsewhere in Europe, topping charts in Belgium (Wallonia), Czech Republic, Hungary, Ireland, Italy, Slovakia,and Switzerland – and the U.K
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They were also invited to perform the song live for the Miss Universe 2009 competition. – this makes it sound as if they were invited, but didn’t perform
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21 April 2010 by Virgin Records (EMI France). – my opinion for dates, is that for writing it should be stated April 21, 2010
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