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one instance each in the readable prose area, and I have added some bits and pieces that came up while I was looking at sources. One new source is a blog entry by the author Poletti, and since she is a published expert on the subject, I feel that her blog qualifies as a reliable source. Finally, I tweaked the reference section for page numbers.
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Okay, I have adjusted the lead to reflect only article contents; I have found that the hotel's view lounge was named the "Sky Room" (but I note that authors Therese Poletti and Michael Crowe use 'skyroom' as a word); I have eliminated all but the initial bolding, I have trimmed wikilinks back to just
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GAN Fixes: I have expanded the lead somewhat, bringing more of the article's contents into the opening summary. I have taken a close look at low-level grammar problems, but such concerns were never my strength as a writer—I believe the issue is fixed, but am not certain. Captions are full sentences
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I am a bit concerned about the bold names appearing throughout the lead. Generally, this should be in the very first sentence, and there should not be any more bold type after that. Can you please see if you can re-write the lead to incorporate
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The lead does not give a good summary of the article. It does not mention anything about how the building was initially built as and used as a church (although it does provide that, but in name only). The lead needs further expansion. See
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Thank you so much for all your hard work, and importantly, for making this article better. With all issues resolved, I am satisfied that this article meets all the criteria for a Good Article. --
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There are issues in the lead. Whatever is mentioned in the lead must come from one of the sections. McAllister Tower and McAllister Tower Apartments are not referred to in any of the sections.
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Wikilinks should only be made on the first mention, and unless the article is very long, they should not be repeated. Please remove any repeated wikilinks.
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Thanks for all your hard work in making this a better article. Do let me know when you have completed these changes for another assessment. --
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There are low level grammar issues in the prose, especially punctuation. Very long sentences could be helped by the inclusion of commas.
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now, with full stops. Also, I have pulled all references from the lead section as all the facts are supported in the article.
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Is "Skyroom" the official name of the cocktail lounge? It needs to be in quotes on first use as it is not a real word.
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There should not be anything in the lead not mentioned in the rest of the article. (GA criteria)
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The lead is now acceptable, but there are still problems with it. In particular, this sentence:
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As the captions have more than one sentence, they should all end with proper punctuation.
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All because of your eagle editing eye! Thanks for your excellent involvement.
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The lead should adequately summarize the content of the article. (GA criteria)
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Ensure that the main points of this sentence are in one of the sections below.
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I will allow up to seven days for these issues to be resolved.
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All images conform to requirements and are properly captioned.
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